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Naruto: Time Control

Auteur: inferno303
Anime et bandes dessinées
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Synopsis

Reborn as Kakashi's older brother with the power to control time. I do this translation just for pleasure https://www.patreon.com/inferno303

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4.5
152 Chs
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Volume 1

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The early chapters of this fanfic, show promise with an acceptable level of translation quality. However, this initial promise quickly deteriorates as the translation becomes increasingly sloppy. Pronouns are frequently mishandled, and the inconsistency in naming conventions leads to confusion. Jutsus, Techniques and entire Concepts are suddenly referred to by new names without any clear reason, which disrupts the reading experience and pulls the reader out of the narrative. From the outset, it is clear that this story is a wish-fulfillment fantasy. The protagonist is overwhelmingly powerful, facing little to no real risk throughout the narrative. The female characters in the side-cast seem to exist solely to extol his virtues, constantly praising his abilities and reinforcing his superiority. As the story progresses into war and the protagonist's extraordinary powers are showcased, any potential for tension evaporates. Every battle he enters is effortlessly won, making the outcomes predictable and stripping away any sense of suspense or danger. The concept of using "Time" as the protagonist's power is intriguing and holds significant potential. However, the execution falls flat as the character's abilities quickly render him omnipotent. This rapid escalation of power diminishes the excitement and complexity that a more balanced approach could have offered. It’s a missed opportunity to explore the intricacies and limitations of time manipulation, which could have added depth and richness to the story. The battles, a crucial element in any action-packed narrative, are disappointingly bland and monotonous. The lack of strategic thinking and clever use of jutsu leaves much to be desired. Fights are resolved with brute force and speed rather than ingenuity, resulting in a series of predictable and uninspiring confrontations. The absence of strategic depth in these battles fails to capture the essence of what makes combat in Naruto so engaging. It is noted in other reviews that the protagonist eventually ventures into other universes. However, having not reached that point in the story myself, I cannot speak to the quality or impact of these cross-universe adventures. This aspect could potentially add a new layer to the narrative, but given the issues present in the earlier parts of the story, I have a lot of skepticism about its execution.

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