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I am in a new world, playing an offline RPG game

Auteur: Small_Otaku
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Synopsis

Alex went to a new world with a game that he built in his previous life. In this new world, he could bring items from that game into real life. What can you say, it was a really exciting thing for him. He began to bring out those items from the games and he also became powerful that normal people won't be able to reach. But when he realized that he won't be able to use those powers because this was a completely normal world, he decided that he will stay low-key.  2 years after graduating from high school he decided he will go to Venus City for further study and complete a mission. But when he comes to the city his life will change. He will get to know that this is not your normal world like his previous world. He gets to know that many years ago portals suddenly appear in this world and monsters begin to come out from those portals. But at this moment humans also gain power and they are called fighters. Those fighters fight with those monsters. So, what will happen? Join his adventures to know more.  ___________ _______________ Well, guys, English wasn't my first language and I am not that good at it. But this would not stop me from writing. I just hope you all will like this novel. If you find any mistakes, please ‌tell me so that I can correct them. Also, if you like the novel, don't forget to review it, add it to your library, and share it with your friends. ------------------------ Hey guys, if you want you can also join my discord. https://discord.gg/C5kUjxVwMC You can also aslo support me in PayPal - https://www.paypal.me/SmallOtaku

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I do like the book and I feel that it will get better but I do have a few qualms with it. First off the Grammer of the book can be very annoying at times and it can be hard to know what the author is trying to say or it's simply the grammar mistakes that make it very annoying. There are times where the author uses words way too many times and I hope that they try to mix it up or write it in a different way so that they don't have to keep using instantly all the time. A big thing that bothers me is when the author and Alex repeats the fact that going deeper in the forest is dangerous. We get it the forest is dangerous but I feel that it would be better to just say it once or twice but not constantly or show ways that the deeper parts of the forest is dangerous. Another thing is that it feels as if the world isn't entirely fleshed out and I hope that the author would take the time to expand the world a bit to give it life. It doesn't have to be huge but maybe get some background characters to talk about things or give small hints about the world around them and how it works. Also please give the other characters some more personality as I feel that they get a bit stale at times but that's just me. That is it from me, other then all of that I feel that the book is pretty amazing and I do enjoy reading it but the mistakes that I listed (Especially the grammar mistakes) make it hard to want to keep reading it. When I see the grammar mistakes I just feel annoyed by it to the point that I want to drop the book and that isn't what I want.

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