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Brezer
BrezerLv141yr
2023-05-22 21:14

so it's an OK story, but there is no showing it's all telling like reading a journal. also what does the game character have to do with anything, why spam its stats, etc, every chapter. I know he gets items from the game via playing, and the stones increase his stats in rl, but the game character stats have nothing to do with real life or its skills, so why show it all the time. on chapter 52 now and the while drama about the family is getting annoying. if you want something to just scan read its okbutnot anything to get serious about there is just not enough to the story.

I am in a new world, playing an offline RPG game

Small_Otaku
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298 Chs

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Small_Otaku
Small_OtakuAuthor

Hey guys, author here. English wasn't my first language. I am not that good at English. So, if you notice any mistakes, tell me about them, so that I can correct them. I hope you will like this novel. If you find any mistakes and also if you have any suggestions, please tell me. I hope you guyswill like this novel.

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TheDaoOfStupidity
TheDaoOfStupidityLv4

Chapter 40, awesome book quite like it, fun story a kinda weird main character but i love the gaming factor and that the MC but it still has the flaw that the time it takes to complete missions is shorter then i think it should be but hey that's a minor thing, good book keep it up

2yr
Daoistv38Amp
Daoistv38AmpLv14

I do like the book and I feel that it will get better but I do have a few qualms with it. First off the Grammer of the book can be very annoying at times and it can be hard to know what the author is trying to say or it's simply the grammar mistakes that make it very annoying. There are times where the author uses words way too many times and I hope that they try to mix it up or write it in a different way so that they don't have to keep using instantly all the time. A big thing that bothers me is when the author and Alex repeats the fact that going deeper in the forest is dangerous. We get it the forest is dangerous but I feel that it would be better to just say it once or twice but not constantly or show ways that the deeper parts of the forest is dangerous. Another thing is that it feels as if the world isn't entirely fleshed out and I hope that the author would take the time to expand the world a bit to give it life. It doesn't have to be huge but maybe get some background characters to talk about things or give small hints about the world around them and how it works. Also please give the other characters some more personality as I feel that they get a bit stale at times but that's just me. That is it from me, other then all of that I feel that the book is pretty amazing and I do enjoy reading it but the mistakes that I listed (Especially the grammar mistakes) make it hard to want to keep reading it. When I see the grammar mistakes I just feel annoyed by it to the point that I want to drop the book and that isn't what I want.

2yr
Young_fruit_Smiley
Young_fruit_SmileyLv14

Too many repetitions & word count 😞 . useless missions .... who cares how he kills or how many he kills .... . fqer playing mobile games all day ... I don't want to know how or what he plays ... . I want to know about his real life .... why he is discarded or about his revenge or romance .... anything but mobile game word count . 😔 sigh**

2yr
Neptune40
Neptune40Lv15

Here’s the thing if you like a story where mc wears a mask and never reveals his abilities and live a life of weakling, then this story is for you.

2yr
NoNameDao
NoNameDaoLv13

it has potential to be a great novel but it's just too repetitive and the way the MC doing thing i would 100000% sure that he will do it after it was too late

2yr
lbis
lbisLv15

It’s an okay read if you can get past the grammatical errors. The authors first language is not english so don’t expect perfection. An editor would be a great help. Book is good enough to pass the time.

2yr
SovereignOfDarc
SovereignOfDarcLv14

Just a question to Author , does MC get revenge on his familly and the guy who acused him ? and if yes , what chapter ?

1yr
PhantomFeaRce
PhantomFeaRceLv13

Wanna know about his world? Domt ask me I knew nothing too, NO WORLD BUILDING. How about Development? Nah Nothing to look forward to. Character Design? If u ask a 3 yr old kid to draw then thats characters in this book. Quality? Not even recyclable

1yr
Joseph_Hill_7805
Joseph_Hill_7805Lv15

Read to chap 60 will not be read furthe ring

1yr
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