a long chp, decent eng and structure and a common yet uncommon concept..nice. Prince GOT SI
suggestions....dont bring modern technology like gun powder and ****,,,,,,, use technology from the ancient greeks, romans, Egyptians and ****.....use roman cement, that **** is apparently very very durable. Their tactics, Farming, Roads are also good...mandatory to join army or some****. Also metal alloys, to create durable cheap ****.
Use runes and carve em onto people and control em with mind [like pain did with magic eye's]...through this make em travel world and MC can build a business using em as an head else where? And he can do this whilst he young cause he isnt going anywhere....I dont think anyone in GOT would allow a child to build business or travel..I realize this is a bit extreme but MC is SI with system...
If magic, give it but dont make it common, make it rare, and make MC a warg,,,use insect and birds for advantage......also do u know a manga called' mujang '?, if u do u could use their ' power ' as a power base here, [its normal nothing too un realistic.]...something like Ki but not too unrealistic. Also lions...lion tamer
Make MC smart and intelligent,,,dont make him a happy naive retard. Make him like chaotic neutral or just neutral...kind and nice but not a naive hero idiot.
Use religion for brain wash and loyalty of public
Any relationships just build, dont make MC a pervert and his lover useless sluts, Make em help MC and **** u know. Theres a new GOT SI FF thats very popular and its nice, very nice. BUT its stupid how MC wants to get lover's attention and there no reason for him to [other than political marriage, but in time useless considering MC power] , she is portrayed as extremely useless, avoid this. My point is this, any love interest, make her smart and intelligent u know,,,give a desirable trait other than looking good.
**: if lovers moms or wives, could ya warn? not my taste,,,I;d say avoid but it is ur bk
