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Darktokio
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2021-10-25 05:34

Me gusta la idea de un sistema en juego de tronos, el problema que le encuento a tu fanfic es que le pusiste muchas cosas al sistema y lo hace casi imposible de leerse. Muchas habilidades y pasivas salidas de la nada. Ubieras hecho que siguiera una rama en especifico. Es mejor un sistema simple como el de mount and blade warban + algunas habilidades manuales.

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Daichi_TBR193
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Sorry for disappointing you 😓 I was merely following the already existing system of D&D 5th edition. Hope you find what you are looking for.

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amaturewriter
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a long chp, decent eng and structure and a common yet uncommon concept..nice. Prince GOT SI suggestions....dont bring modern technology like gun powder and ****,,,,,,, use technology from the ancient greeks, romans, Egyptians and ****.....use roman cement, that **** is apparently very very durable. Their tactics, Farming, Roads are also good...mandatory to join army or some****. Also metal alloys, to create durable cheap ****. Use runes and carve em onto people and control em with mind [like pain did with magic eye's]...through this make em travel world and MC can build a business using em as an head else where? And he can do this whilst he young cause he isnt going anywhere....I dont think anyone in GOT would allow a child to build business or travel..I realize this is a bit extreme but MC is SI with system... If magic, give it but dont make it common, make it rare, and make MC a warg,,,use insect and birds for advantage......also do u know a manga called' mujang '?, if u do u could use their ' power ' as a power base here, [its normal nothing too un realistic.]...something like Ki but not too unrealistic. Also lions...lion tamer Make MC smart and intelligent,,,dont make him a happy naive retard. Make him like chaotic neutral or just neutral...kind and nice but not a naive hero idiot. Use religion for brain wash and loyalty of public Any relationships just build, dont make MC a pervert and his lover useless sluts, Make em help MC and **** u know. Theres a new GOT SI FF thats very popular and its nice, very nice. BUT its stupid how MC wants to get lover's attention and there no reason for him to [other than political marriage, but in time useless considering MC power] , she is portrayed as extremely useless, avoid this. My point is this, any love interest, make her smart and intelligent u know,,,give a desirable trait other than looking good. **: if lovers moms or wives, could ya warn? not my taste,,,I;d say avoid but it is ur bk

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