Review Detail of Zherie17 in Worthy "BL"

Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours. 1. Story wise, it has an interesting, but a slow-paced plot. 2. You probably needed to put a prologue, or something to attract other readers since each chapter looked like a journal entry instead of a narrative/'story'. 3. Commas are misplaced everywhere. Do consult an editor about your grammar control. Thank you.