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groomable6dComentado porNZT
I held the pill between my thumb and index finger. Taking a deep breath, I was ready to swallow it. "NZT".- groomable16dComentado porCh 1 Tony modification shop
- groomable16drespondió a Shaun_CampbellI am way cuter than your normal baby; my hair color is light brown, but the unique thing is that my eye color is different—one is red and the other is purple.
- groomable16dComentado porI looked over, and she made me a bit jealous because of how beautiful she looked. I mean, I am easily in the hot category. If you do not believe it, you can look in the comments to see my picture.
- groomable17dComentado por"What the fuck!" I screamed in a panic. But the voice I heard coming out from my mouth was not uttering human speech. But I was… meowing.
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Hi I am Groomable
Good morning and welcome, dear readers. My name is Daoist Slothful Cat. Well, my pen name that is. - groomable18dComentado por
I don't understand what's happening. Who is the MC? Is he the doctor or Jared? Also, the chapter is too long. I did not even complete the chapter because I was not able to immerse myself in the story, and it is too long. This is a webnovel; a chapter is not supposed to be this long. At least tell me who the MC is so I can read properly.
Ch 1 Deep Breath - groomable18dComentado porScene fades with Macffree looking out of the window, a mix of anticipation and strategy in his eyes.
- groomable19dComentado porCh 1 1
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The story was going great in the first chapter, but you need to make sure the plot is not chaotic like right now. I am an amateur writer, but I still try to keep my characters plots good. Your mistake: 1. You did not give us a chapter about the confrontation between John and the agents. 2. You did not give us anything to link from when and how John got his revenge in Mexico to the second chapter in which John is living in America; I only read about him killing the captive. 3. When did Jay or Gloria ask John to live with them? 4. It was written that John was loaded, so why is he not living in his own house with his butler or a guardian? 5. Who is John's guardian? 6. The second chapter feels confusing because you tried to make it seem like a show script with good creativity, but, eh, you know, it does not fit a light novel style. 7. There was a line that might have been a mistake, which means you did not quickly read your chapter. Remember to do that because grammar checkers do not fix things like plot confusion, like the line talking about agents knowing he had superpowers when in reality they did not know that. At least that's what I learned from a reader's point of view. It is your own choice whether to fix these points. I mentioned it because I just thought I should help a fellow writer a bit. :)
Ch 2 sterotype - groomable22drespondió a AdiavtsCh 15 Janet
- groomable22drespondió a DarkRedRioOkay, now let's start the chapter, you fuckers.]
- groomable22drespondió a Geoffrey_Abbott
They stop in the later chapters.
================================================================ - groomable23drespondió a AgentBoin
It is my fault. Thanks for letting me know.
The doctor who had calmed down explained, "Well, these are not diseases, as you would call them, but conditions that happened due to the alteration in the genes of the child. They are not harmful. As I explained earlier to her majesty and the queen consort, heterochromia iridum is a condition in which the baby has different eye colors, and ambiguous genitalia is a condition in which the child can have both reproductive organs, as in the case of the princess and, may he be in peace, Prince Albert's child. The child has both reproductive organs, so we can't know if the child is a boy or girl." - groomable23drespondió a Quake_Midaro
I have so many things to do before the courses have even started that I feel like I don't have enough time. I try time management, but that is hard.
{Author-chan: Hello readers, I didn't write a chapter yesterday because I was just lazy and also making one of my decisions about whether I should pursue law or psychology. I am not able to decide, and it's eating my mind up. - groomable23drespondió a Nobe_SoenI got inside my 1969 Chevrolet Corvette ZL1 and drove to my office. Behind me as well as in front of me were two cars, each filled with bodyguards, and we drove towards the Yggdrasil building. [Pic in the comments.]
- groomable24drespondió a Nobe_Soen
I do not have the ability or patience to draw a picture. If you may, that would be much appreciated, my good sir.
I got inside my 1969 Chevrolet Corvette ZL1 and drove to my office. Behind me as well as in front of me were two cars, each filled with bodyguards, and we drove towards the Yggdrasil building. [Pic in the comments.] - groomable24dComentado por"I don't want to lower my salary! It's just that… I feel like even $100k is enough for a two-month job. I don't exactly need too much money. And we have [Harry Potter] to earn money from, after all." I gave my excuses.
- groomable24drespondió a Quake_Midaro
I did not give entrance exams for the prestigious top law universities, but I have done an interview at a university for both psychology and dual majors in business and law. If I get into both degree classes, then I will do both. Just thinking about the amount of knowledge I need to consume in both of these degrees makes me shiver.
{Author-chan: Hello readers, I didn't write a chapter yesterday because I was just lazy and also making one of my decisions about whether I should pursue law or psychology. I am not able to decide, and it's eating my mind up. - groomable24drespondió a The_Dark_Hydrax
Thanks; luckily, I do not have a contract otherwise.
{Author-chan: I feel guilty because I am not consistent in writing chapters every day, and it makes my writing spirit low. Sorry for that.