Justin_Steiner
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This story definitely has some consistency issues.
ewww
Isn't this a translation? Even further, it's fanfiction. That makes it two steps removed from you even having any credit to it. If your motivation to translate is money and not spreading a story you enjoy, I suggest looking for something else to do.
This really is going to be an annoyance we constantly have to listen to throughout the entire story, isn't it?
Is this going to be a constant thing? Because it's already gotten old.
I think the point is, it isn't her own requirement. She just basically loves unconditionally. Maybe? I don't know.
cringe
Of course you're going to get backlash for writing an insert fic then still focusing on the original MC. From what I understand, even when the POV switches, you still have Rudeus as an important part of the story, right? That's a recipe for disaster, especially considering what most people read inserts for and the demographic of this site.
Yea, that's it for me. Good luck with the story. I can point out a lot of things I'd consider negative, like your character being overall unlikable, or your incessant need to repeat yourself over and over again, but overall this has just been annoying to read.
Lightning. Thunder is the sound.
That's some early 2000's humor right there.
I mean this girl was what, 16? I'd be more likely to pity her 'cause a girl like that doesn't usually have a good home life.
I wish we could just stop giving an actual measurement. Leave it to the viewer and these arguments go away. "Wow, it's big!"There you go.
This is a crime