Amazing start! I’m thrilled to see where this story goes. Your idea is one of the most original I’ve seen in a while, and Ron’s humor is a delightful addition. Overall, it’s incredibly enjoyable. Having read hundreds, if not over a thousand, of Harry Potter fanfics, I can confidently say this is one of the best beginnings I’ve come across. I’m eager to see what else you have in store.

This fan fiction is impressive, offering a bit of everything for readers. I've read up to chapter 97, and the story continues to captivate as we approach the second year. Most characters remain true to the original canon while still showcasing unique and original elements. That being said, there are quite a few problems with the wording used, mostly in the later chapters that I have read. An example would be: uses her instead of him. Still giving it 5 stars because I enjoyed a new Harry Potter fan fic coming out.

Thanks. It has been corrected.

I owe you

I'm genuinely enjoying it—please continue with the great work. Although it begins at a somewhat slow pace, I think things will be speeding along soon.

I have edited out a significant amount of the racism, sexism, and geopolitical themes present in many Chinese books.

woot

It's crazy, but I've been remembering it incorrectly for years.

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I agree, Lector. In addition to that, there are numerous errors with pronouns, names, and several off-putting remarks. Furthermore, the author seems to struggle with maintaining consistency with what was written in the earlier chapters. I try to keep things running smoothly, but I'm aware that sometimes things sound off. Anyway, hope you all like it.

They have Snape.......

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Done, thanks.

Thank you Sami_Alfoheday. Fixed. Also, I changed the wording so it is not used multiple times in a short time, and corrected his name.

Fixed. Also, I changed the wording around so it is not used multiple times in a short amount of time.

ya, I wanted to change it. When I first started reading this I thought he ate Sirus!

Guess I will give it to him. He was empowering himself to fight the dog, right?

I don't plan to. I have pages written (and pages more of notes) but I'm just not happy with it yet. I know what direction I want to go with my own story but I don't feel I'm up to writing what I see in my head yet if that makes any sense. I'm hoping that going over someone else's work will help.

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