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ILLYAchan

ILLYAchan

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Quiet~~Traditional/Digital Artist~~Student~~Hobbies: reading, drawing and..many more (>.<) My profile and background is my art work:> ig: @illyachan8 ~visit if you like to see my art @luna_noir16~ visit to see posts about my novels Discord: ILLYAchan#3876 ILLYAchan#7842 Novel: Make Your Wish/Mystical Encounters

2018-11-11 Se unióPhilippines
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  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan3 years ago
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    The story is good. It just needs some editing in regards to grammar though I think the author said he's currently working at it. This is only an advice, the first few chapters will be more engaging when there's some bit of narration in between the conversations of the characters. The prologue has too many upper case words though it somehow works out in the next chapter. I think chapter 1's upper case words are good though. (I can hear the main char. shouting in my mind while reading) unlike in the prologue, I feel like skipping the pages. Overall, nice, interesting that needs fixing in some parts. Anyway, Good luck author!

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
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    the va.. van gogh's paintings. Sell it for millions

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  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
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    The story has a good plot that will bring readers in. The main character and the world he is in seems interesting. I can see that there are many more to tell in this hidden gem story. The author is currently editing it so I hope it will improve more as some events are not described clearly and I suggest that some dialogues be separated from the paragraphs as I find it too long and I am lost from what I'm reading. (Although it's just my advice, it's up to you author!) Overall, the story will be a good novel to read in one's free time. Keep the good work author!

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
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    Interesting, the romance that will happen or will not, have caught my attention, and continued reading through the last chapter. The novel is new so there are still few pieces of information about them but it makes me anticipate more. Overall, it is a well-written story though need proofreading in some chapters. Anyway, keep up the good work author!

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
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    The story is so good! The description made me sympathize with the mc and his situation is a little heartbreaking. So far, the story is so interesting and engaging! The grammar is nice and has a good flow.Keep it up author!

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
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    😢

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
    respondió a Lexi_Roberson

    Thanks for the reviews! (btw the 'add to library' button is beside the cover of the book when using laptop when you searched and clicked a story;) )

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
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    This is a good novel to expect for a new one. Mine is really bad in my first drafts and edits XD. So far, I've been interested how the mc will cope up with her life considering her health problems. And will read further to know more. The only thing that bothers me is some long paragraphs that almost covered the whole page though it's a personal preference. I tend to read novels with shorter ones. Over all, the author is doing a good job! Keep it up author! I'll wait for the releases of future chapters! If you want to see an improvement of my novel for reference in grammar and everything, see the difference of quality between my two novels. (If you just want though and the other one is over a year old so don't mind the views despite the low quality)

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
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    A well-written and nice story! It's a system story but it's entirely different as it involves history. It what makes the story catch readers and the way the system is explained didn't bore me at all. The writing quality is great and updates are fast. Overall, this a good novel to read. Keep it up, author!

  • ILLYAchan
    ILLYAchan4 years ago
    Publicado por

    The system used in the novel is unique and refreshing to read. It is intriguing to see how the mc will cope up with the system and how will she get revenge. Moreover, it's smooth to read along the chapters. Overall, the story is full of potentials because of the system used and the characters. Keep up the good work author!