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Kurama24
Kurama24Lv41yr
2023-06-08 00:04

SPOILERS YOU'VE BEEN WARNED: Read till latest chapter (30) Cons: 1. The grammar is just terrible, like u can understand what the author wrote but u will get a migraine while trying to understand it. 2. The interaction between the mc and some characters (especially with jinwoo) feel robotic/emotionless it's just too hollow. 3. The mc still can't accept being a female after living in his new body for 18 years not to mention he has some slightly edgy/overreacting tendencies with jin ho even though the guy did nothing wrong or when the mc used intimidation on a crowd of people just bcz they are fangirling over him. 4. The Mc has too many skills, traits, abilities but hardly uses any of them like i question what's the point of some of them especially frogadier who is just there for no reason and most of the elements he unlocked. 5. There isn't much character development, the Mc's mentality stays the same throughout the 30 chaps unless u consider his weird 1st dungeon dive 6. (This one depends on the reader) The storyline is practically the same and the chapters are fast paced (around 20 chapters to go from jinwoo getting his system to the guild conference in america). Pros: 1. The isn't a pushover, is somewhat smart. 2. The concept of the ff is good especially with the killing Reincarnator's idea. 3. Not sure yet but with the pacing of the ff soo far it looks like it will be multiverse traveling in the future especially since Mc is practically the strongest atm and the whole reincarnation goddess behind him. 4. It's single romance soo far with jin ah, Hae in will probably be with jin woo, insect monarch is still unknown, as for the japanese huntress with tattoos she is normal friends with the mc. TLDR: It's like the author prepared himself to make some french fries but they ended up slightly overcooked and for some reason he mixed them with an octopus flavored sauce so it ended up weird but good at the same time😅

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Dawn_Nexus
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Dawn_Nexus
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Well, I like the review, it will help me improve in future, anyway It is my first novel and I want to make my own novel and this fanfic is just for my experience and fun.

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Dawn_Nexus
Dawn_NexusAuthor

And thank with your review, 10 review completed and I got good rating for fanfic.

Dawn_Nexus:Well, I like the review, it will help me improve in future, anyway It is my first novel and I want to make my own novel and this fanfic is just for my experience and fun.
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Kurama24
Kurama24Lv4

Dawn_Nexus:And thank with your review, 10 review completed and I got good rating for fanfic.
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Kurama24
Kurama24Lv4

Glad i could help I really look forward to seeing the new ff u will be writing and if u want i don't mind helping correcting grammar mistakes and stuff like that bcz next tuesday is last day for my exams then I'm free

Dawn_Nexus:Well, I like the review, it will help me improve in future, anyway It is my first novel and I want to make my own novel and this fanfic is just for my experience and fun.
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Most believeable start to a reincarnation fanfic I have seen yet. The premise of the story is decent, however it seems like it’s a bad Chinese or Korean translation with the multitude of grammatical mistakes. There are also a few spelling mistakes aswell. One suggestion is for the status to space out the skill name and the (x) due to it being a little confusing to read. The character tries to hold onto his “manliness” despite being changed to a girl for over 9years which one would think he/she wouldn’t care about after getting used to. Mind you that this isn’t saying I dislike it, but it’s got a lot of polishing before it becomes “good.” Author of you do read this I recommend before you get to far till it becomes unchangeable to shove your work through something like grammerly, do some spellchecking, and try and make the story flow a little better. Otherwise good luck with the future of your story.

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This is probably the first time you've written a fanfic, right? I'll be fair here and say it's not awful but it's not great either, it's actually between bad and meh, sorry. I can feel a bit of personality in your MC, but that's it and nothing more, to be honest you rushed things too much and I hardly feel the impact of events, your MC doesn't seem to feel either. By the way, the only one that can be called a character in this fanfic is your MC and that's for very, very little and that's worrying. This happens with a lot of new fanfics writers, these authors are so focused on making their characters interact in some way with the cannon story that they end up doing everything in a hurry, and then they want to go straight to the next point of the story, you can imagine how it ends, right? If you like writing fics I suggest you take it easy and pay attention to your story, compare it with others you really like and see if you are satisfied with your work, if so, well, keep going, if not, take more time to polishing it. I also suggest some character development arcs, if your MC is someone who just gets it right, it gets boring to follow her story, make her fail convincingly, create flaws for her and let her overcome them! Of course, you don't have to kill anyone or anything like that, but a few defeats build character.

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