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"harass" not 'harassment ' because after [to] we use the' verb' not ' noun'.
"left" not 'life'
I don't think "handsome" is the best word to describe a car
This is my creation , so of course I an not gonna give my self a bad review. I know I'm lacking in some areas but I will get better. All in all , if you kept reading until chapter three you will notice the improvement. Here is my review to myself : -The world building is good. -The story is excellent. -The writing style need improvements. -Spelling mistakes close to none, you may find some here and there. [img=update]