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After a long time, Isaac finally succeeded in transcending existence itself, something theoretically almost impossible. Or… he should have succeeded, had he really cut off all of his attachments and feelings, not just the ones connected to the world that he had lived in. In his ignorance, he hadn’t taken his attachments to worlds that he had deemed imaginary into account. Having been reminded of this fact, he found himself on the threshold to full transcendence. He had two choices: Either giving up these attachments as well to reach the goal that he had chased after for so long, or postponing doing so until later and using the byproduct of his attempt at transcendence - having turned into an omnipotent being beyond existence - to go on a journey in the infinite number of worlds waiting for him. To fulfill his last wishes and to meet the people that he had thought fictional before, Isaac used his newfound power on a single, tailor-made creation. The Wish Fulfillment System. This is a story about a number of lonely people trying to overcome their loneliness by sticking together, as well as the fates of the people connected to the system that Isaac created. --------------- My novel series "Reincarnation Cycle's Unfortunate Bug" on Amazon: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0CYHGRR8M/ Discord Server: https://discord.gg/NdAjjmXSDh Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/sh1ro --------------- Hi there, Shiro/the author here. This story is one that I decided to write for personal enjoyment and so that I could share it with a few friends. I decided to start uploading it here so that a few of you can potentially get some enjoyment out of it as well. If you have any constructive criticism or notice a mistake, feel free to let me know, I truly appreciate any chance I can get to improve my writing. Now, if you don't end up enjoying the story, sorry about that. No story is for everyone. And considering that this one was primarily written purely for my own enjoyment, I don't know how many others will have the same taste that I do. Yes, during its early stages, this story will incorporate some worlds and characters which are at first glance similar to ones that you're already familiar with. I mean no disrespect to the authors of those original works, I was simply intrigued by their creations and decided to borrow them for parts of the story. - Current Release Schedule: 1 chapter every two weeks on Sunday, between 9 p.m. and 11 p.m. GMT+1 (More chapters can appear as bonus chapters, so this is the absolute minimum.) - Chapter length: At least 3.5k words per chapter - the average is at ~3.97k at the moment. (Yes, you're in for significantly longer reads than usual.) --------------- In case you want to support my writing endeavours or read more of what I've already written, I'd be very grateful if you checked out either of these: 1) My novel series "Reincarnation Cycle's Unfortunate Bug" on Amazon: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0CYHGRR8M/ 2) My Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/sh1ro Cover created by: https://twitter.com/amekojam

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Chapter 1Prologue

Within a dark, labyrinthian cave system, two girls were running at almost superhuman speed. The one in the lead had long golden hair and was relaxedly jogging, while the other had long golden yellow hair in the form of a ponytail and was trying really hard to keep up. Loud roars occasionally resounded in the darkness that was only kept at bay by a ball of light hovering over the latter girl's staff.

"Ais, wait up!"

Hearing her companion's exhausted plea, the girl in front, Ais Wallenstein, slowed down her pace and came to a halt after decelerating for a few meters. She wore a white and black battlecloth, black arm covers and long, blue boots. Over this she had fastened a few pieces of armour to keep her safe in this perilous place: a headguard, a breastplate, arm guards, hip guards, and knee guards. An elegant and thin longsword with a blue hilt was strapped to the left side of her hip, resting in its sheath. Her golden eyes looked at the girl following her with concern and care, while she responded curtly, her face expressionless.

"Lefiya, you okay?"

Having heard her name being spoken in Ais' gentle voice, Lefiya Viridis' long and pointy ears flapped slightly while a light blush crept up her face. Her dark blue eyes darted around a bit before finally overcoming her embarrassment. Like all mages, she didn't wear armour, but instead robe-like attire. In her case, this consisted of a short red cape on top of a white shirt and pink corset dress. A purple bow hung at her collar and her legs were mostly covered by white stockings and pink shoes. The expensive-looking white staff in her hands had a golden metallic tip in the shape of an opening bud, housing a blue crystal.

After heaving heavily for a few seconds, Lefiya finally looked up at Ais and smiled happily.

"Thank you for worrying, I'm fine now. Sorry for dragging you down!"

Before Ais could do more than blink and tilt her head in slight confusion, because Lefiya, in her eyes, wasn't being a burden at all, a few much louder roars than any they had previously been exposed to reverberated within the dark passage.

"Close!"

Leaving just this single word, Ais instantly shot off towards a branching path as if she had been fired by a missile launcher, forcing the exhausted Elf to desperately run after her again.

Seconds later, what came into Ais' field of view was a host of various different monsters, consisting of cow headed humanoid monsters called Minotaurs, dog monsters with flames spewing out of their mouths called Hellhounds and tiger monsters called Ligerfangs. They were surrounding a peculiar phenomenon while roaring madly. The aforementioned phenomenon was something that instantly brought Ais' charge to a halt, while her eyes widened in disbelief. This gave Lefiya just enough time to catch up to her, before staring at the same exact spot that Ais was looking at, almost not daring to trust her own eyes.

The large and dark chamber was lit up by a dark blue vortex seemingly leading towards a pitch black, void-like space. The vortex was almost 50 meters in diameter and hovered in midair, 40 meters above the ground. A primordial and intimidating energy was surrounding the vortex, making a shiver run down both of the girls' spines involuntarily. From within the void, really slowly, a human body descended. It was the body of a young man, seemingly around 18 or 19 years old, who looked slightly muscular. His eyes were closed and he had short, brown hair that was strongly ruffled by the energy the vortex dispersed. A white shirt, grey pants and blue-white shoes clad his body and looked completely out of place.

Before any more observations could be made about the mysterious young man, both girls were brought back to reality when the vortex suddenly disappeared and his pair of blue-green eyes opened. A look of panic overcame the handsome face, followed by a loud curse.

"God dammit, why am I in midair?!"

While Lefiya hadn't yet realized the severity of the situation because she was still distracted by the power displayed by the vortex that had just disappeared, Ais had already recognized the problem. The young man was, unexpectedly, completely and utterly powerless, like an ordinary human being. He was also currently 40 meters above the ground in a dark cave, in midair - and glared upon by more than twenty monsters that could tear far stronger people apart even in a one versus one scenario.

Without spending any time thinking about what horrible kind of luck a person would have to encounter to end up in such a situation, Ais jumped into the air towards the young man with a resolute but still mostly expressionless countenance, trying to save him. Less than a second later, she gently caught him in a princess carry position, before glancing at his face really quickly, intending to look away and focus on the surrounding monsters on the ground after she had made sure he was safe. But the moment she gazed into his eyes, something that she could have never expected occurred.

Her heart, the heart of a girl who cut off most of her emotions, a heart that hadn't beaten faster than necessary to ensure continued survival ever since she had been separated from her mother… started beating extremely rapidly, causing her to blush heavily, mirroring the young man in her arms, whose cheeks had started to redden as well. There was primarily one thing that she could make out in his eyes, and it resonated with her on an almost spiritual level - devastating loneliness. Before she could even think about turning her head away, her boots had already made contact with the ground, right next to the monsters that she had originally planned to swiftly deal with.

She instinctively knew that from this moment onwards, her life would never be the same.

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CrimsonsSableLv14

The only reason Writing Quality is a 4 Star instead of 5 is because some things can get a bit long winded during explanations. Don't get me wrong on it however, I enjoy that but I know a lot of people who don't, to me it show you put thought into how you want things to be explained instead of just rushing through them. Everything else is 5 Stars due to you having a schedule and sticking to it unless something happens or like the anniversary where you released an extra chapter, the story development shows you've researched what you are writing about and try to get everything to roughly line up with the world the story takes place,even if the concept wasn't in the world to begin with. Character design is great, you have characters that have flaws and to me it makes them seem more authentic, you also have it so they work on them which is another great thing. World background as I said towards the top you research the world to make things seem more natural so that is a solid, and considering you want to quite possibly take this to other worlds as long as the same detail is put into each of them as the Danmachi world I will be extremely happy to continue reading this story. Overall the story is awesome, if time is needed to ensure that it continues to be as it is in coming chapters than by all means take however long you need, just let us know so we aren't stuck in limbo waiting for the next chapter. Keep up the good work and I hope you continue to have fun writing this story in the future.

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This could have been a really good novel. But it suffers from something that a lot of slice of life novels do. When their is no action when he is not getting stronger, it's boring. Very, very boring. The only thing that you have to supplement is drama, the drama that he's gonna leave Loki's familia to start his own, or some other stuff. And really it's not enough. His relationship with the main female character is also boring. I don't find their development to be bad, just plain boring. What's the sad thing is. The combat is pretty interesting, but the chapters are so long and so uninteresting that you get small interesting parts within each chapter and long uninteresting parts that smother it. Like an entire chapter where he's fighting in the dungeon, then he finds an interesting hidden door ooh, interesting. And he..... Leaves and doesn't explore it. All because he can do the boring task of mapping the entire dungeon floor he's on. I mean, why make something interesting when you can have him? Do something that's really, really boring. There's also small mistakes that that take away interesting things. Like when he rinks up to level 2. It says he has two choices to on class. Swordsman class and the hunter class. Now it describes what the swordsman class does for him. But he says it's not the right choice for him. So he chooses the hunter class and it never tells you what that class is. I had to go and look it up. You get all excited about oh, if the hunter class is really cool. And it doesn't tell you. And if you're not gonna make a lot of the story more about him either getting stronger or fighting strong people then you have to make the slice of life parts of the chapter's shorter. Having somebody walk around town is boring. Instead, have them set up a business that's slice of life. Have them learn a different craft like blacksmithing. Something other than just walking around talking to people or training people. Because the way you have him set up as a trainer is also not really fun. It feels like they're dragging him down more than he's supporting them. I also because of how all his growth is blanketed in monotony its not really excitings and seem almost slow. It actually takes some of the wonder out of it. I mean him getting Ichor was supposed to be really cool an i expected him to share it with Ais but then he had all those random misfit people with him. It kinda made a important moment less then it was supposed to be.

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