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Odinsohn543
Odinsohn543Lv43yr
2020-12-15 16:35

I am satisfied with the story, it is well written, it is an alternative timeline and once you bring that in there are infinite possibilities, However, I don't like that the mc shares his secret with many people, this behavior is too dangerous for me, otherwise I can not complain

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Shiro_the_Hero
Shiro_the_HeroAuthor

I highly appreciate your reevaluation - You have my utmost respect for doing so! I'm really happy that you enjoy the story so far, even more now that you know my plans for it :) Glad I got to clear up some of the confusion. I hope that, in the future, I can let you see what I have in mind regarding the secrets-sharing - it will still take some time for the story to arrive there, though. There will be some negative consequences for doing so, don't you worry~ I can see where you're coming from, and why you think it would be dangerous. In any case, may you have an amazing rest of the week o7

Odinsohn543
Odinsohn543Lv4

Well, when you make a mistake you should also admit it and I'm the kind of person who's very perceptive. I look forward to seeing where you move the story.

Shiro_the_Hero:I highly appreciate your reevaluation - You have my utmost respect for doing so! I'm really happy that you enjoy the story so far, even more now that you know my plans for it :) Glad I got to clear up some of the confusion. I hope that, in the future, I can let you see what I have in mind regarding the secrets-sharing - it will still take some time for the story to arrive there, though. There will be some negative consequences for doing so, don't you worry~ I can see where you're coming from, and why you think it would be dangerous. In any case, may you have an amazing rest of the week o7
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Shiro_the_Hero
Shiro_the_HeroAuthor

Honestly, I really respect that. A lot. Especially nowadays, it's rare to encounter your kind of person :D It makes me really happy. I'll try my very hardest to deliver a good story, and I'm glad to have you along for the ride :) While I can't promise that you'll love all parts of it (as we probably different preferences), I can promise that I'll do my best!

Odinsohn543:Well, when you make a mistake you should also admit it and I'm the kind of person who's very perceptive. I look forward to seeing where you move the story.
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Ulescu_Constantin
Ulescu_ConstantinLv1

what second world gonna be?

Shiro_the_Hero
Shiro_the_HeroAuthor

I recently answered this question in the comments of chapter 91 - feel free to have a look! :D

Ulescu_Constantin:what second world gonna be?
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CrimsonsSable
CrimsonsSableLv14

The only reason Writing Quality is a 4 Star instead of 5 is because some things can get a bit long winded during explanations. Don't get me wrong on it however, I enjoy that but I know a lot of people who don't, to me it show you put thought into how you want things to be explained instead of just rushing through them. Everything else is 5 Stars due to you having a schedule and sticking to it unless something happens or like the anniversary where you released an extra chapter, the story development shows you've researched what you are writing about and try to get everything to roughly line up with the world the story takes place,even if the concept wasn't in the world to begin with. Character design is great, you have characters that have flaws and to me it makes them seem more authentic, you also have it so they work on them which is another great thing. World background as I said towards the top you research the world to make things seem more natural so that is a solid, and considering you want to quite possibly take this to other worlds as long as the same detail is put into each of them as the Danmachi world I will be extremely happy to continue reading this story. Overall the story is awesome, if time is needed to ensure that it continues to be as it is in coming chapters than by all means take however long you need, just let us know so we aren't stuck in limbo waiting for the next chapter. Keep up the good work and I hope you continue to have fun writing this story in the future.

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