LastGod

its good to catch these things early i do thing the bones of this novel are REALLY GOOD. So i wont mind coming back to read a rewrite. I like all the characters. I think this can be a cool novel if you do minor tweeks about the pacing but that adjustment happens in every new fanfic.

moron

PERFECT BUDDY GOOD JOB!!!

..... no no no he has NO IDEA THAT HIS SCAR WAS DONE BY MAGIC AT THIS POINT! LISTEN BUDDY FANFIC IS FILLED WITH POTTERHEADS U GOTTA BE VERY CAREFUL ABOUT THESE SCENES!

OOOH!!

YES!!!!

Bad. Sorry, but now he kinda has no reason to be IN the Clover Kingdom. This is not a small fight. This is irreconcilable differences. If it was supposed to be just a small fight, you messed up. This ends all path forward for both of them in this relationship. I see zero path forward, nor do i want one for them now cause hes kinda got a point about her being an idiot. So unless you have a new female lead lined up, this novel needs almost a new story. 😆 he needs a new female target, and he needs to have a new goal. Because of the slow updates and small chapters this is kinda a frustrating development. 😑

Nope, i think you're right he needs to be more free. Also, you need to understand. It takes months to shoot a movie if you're the lead. In a year, he may be able to be in 3, but not anymore. And if it's a big movie with lots of practical effects and sets like HP, then one movie a year is max. So you need to understand that the same problem will happen if you go to the Star Wars route. I think you need to also slow down and skip forward a little past his childhood years. He's writing too much, or at least you need to slow down all the IP he's creating. It looks like just a list of stories instead of actual things he's doing. And right now, he should just be doing voice acting, then 1 or 3 moives a year. So its gonna be kinda boring unless you want him on a disney series, which i would actually say might be a good movie. But it's up to you. This is getting kinda too fast-paced with all the stuff he's doing. Hollywood doesn't move this fast.

........ hes you know.... korean. but okay.