The Skill Extractor in OnePiece

grammar needs work,too many mistakes , its readable though. story: i lost interst when he got 14 wishes, does "story development" still matter at this point, if he cant become a god in 1 month with 14 wishes than this story is bad for a different reason. character: have not read far enough for that, but the impression of the mc is "meh" fine i guess. world: "meh" but apparently he doesn't join luffy which gives me hope that he actually explores it in a different way than luffy. and since detailed knowledge of op is gone he wont join either. overall impression of this story 3/10 5/10 would be an average story, decent in grammar and story development, likeable mc ect. this story isn't quite there yet.

[Plot lvl. 1/10] [Grammer lvl. 2/10] [Story Development lvl. 3/10] Overall - [Story lvl. 2/10] Not recommended for new readers. .... ... .. .

SPOILERS: Things that made me turn away from this 1. The explanation where the MC body is what would come about when madara, hashirama and a rando uzumaki F*cked and had a child. 2. Chakra in One piece 3. Cringe "Mc name is one" 4. Another one of those Mc who is a straw-hat/luffy's dog 5. Grammarly being free but still unused.

i lose when he got 14wishes. . . . . .

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Bad for: 14 wishes. ???? Story canon. MC secondary character. MC very stupid Grammar 2/1 ,.,.,.,.,',',',.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.-'-'-'-','-','-'-'-'-'-'-''-'-'-'-'-''-+!+!+¡+(«(«(;;&«;(+(+(+¡¡+¡+¡++(+(+(+(+(+((+(+(+(++(+(+(+(+(+(+¡+¡+¡+¡+¡/¡¡ ¡/¡+!+!+¡+!/!/!/!//(/&;3;$;$8¡;&/(/,.,.,.,.,',',',.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.-'-'-'-','-','-'-'-'-'-'-''-'-'-'-'-''-+!+!+¡+(«(«(;;&«;(+(+(+¡¡+¡+¡++(+(+(+(+(+((+(+(+(++(+(+(+(+(+(+¡+¡+¡+¡+¡/¡¡ ¡/¡+!+!+¡+!/!/!/!//(/&;3;$;$8¡;&/(/

Sorry but stories where you get wishes is a bit stupid... But keep writing, who knows, perhaps it will get better Good luck blablablblablalball

bro so far so good, at first I thought it would look like another novel that has a naruto system in the onepiece, but it doesn’t show much of the naruto world, but it’s not so focused, it’s well divided between shinobe techniques, the art of the sword and everything else, I thought it was also nice that he didn’t join the straw hats because if he joined there wouldn’t be any logic since he is much stronger than any 1 of the pack he should be almost at the level of admiral, the grammar is a little confusing sometimes but nothing too serious (if you can put the level of potecina he represents as a novice vici-admiral, senior vici-admiral, or captain yonko, it would be cool, and continue with the story because it is a very of the best so far of one piece with things from other worlds)

Qualidade de escrita............... ☆☆☆☆☆ - não realmente 5 ☆, mas darei 5 ☆ ▪︎Desenvolvimento da história........ ☆☆☆☆☆ - até aí tudo bem, não entrar no luffy é uma boa decisão, tnx para não nurfing o mc. 5 ☆ sem harém bs. Por enquanto nenhum romance bem feito. ( chega de mc do mestre pokemon) ▪︎Design de personagens........... ☆☆☆☆☆ - uma boa mistura de personagens. Uchiha Madara, Hashirama e Reinhard. Excelente. Mas, porque não está usando a habilidade de hashirama? (regeneração e elemento madeira). Ou você está planejando usá-lo no futuro, hmmm. ▪︎Atualizando a estabilidade.......... ☆☆☆☆☆ ▪︎Plano de fundo......... ☆☆☆☆☆

Penulisan cukup bagus namun kurang nya dalam percakapanya ...... .. .. ....... Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawaaaa .mc kurang kuat tambahin om .....

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