The writing and style is good. I like the descriptions, and the settings were easy to envision. The MC Belle is interesting. I’m not sure what to make of her. The last chapter, 4, she was different from the restrained, stoical girl in the previous chapters. She actually bit back at Mary, and then she murdered Mark for a reason unknown to us but which sounded like a fair reason to her. I like this duality of cold blooded, light hearted, and quiet, but I hope it better connects it all together. Due to the time skips and shifts in personality, it feels inconsistent/unconnected.
The timeline, as mentioned in a comment, left me both confused and intrigued. It sounds like a greater plot is brewing, and I like the mystery aspect. But here too I hope they can better be strung together for clarity so I can piece them together more easily.
Questions like is the man from the beginning Mark? Or the noble? What did he do for her to kill him? What is that passage and diamond encrusted key? The stone’s significance? How did a noble end up in this situation? Does she know the true story? You’ve certainly ran with the mystery, or I could just be my usual goldfish self, unable to put all the clues together. XD
Regardless, this is only 4 chapters, so there’s much to happen. I look forward to seeing the developments, and this one is definitely going into my library for the great writing and interesting story and characters.
