BillNyeThePGGuy
This'll be a more action-orientated one compared to my last novel, "Waifu Gacha System." I'll do my best to make the fights fun and realistic. BNHA was chosen as a base world for two reasons: 1) It is a world that uses powers, he can benefit from the hell he is forced into when he sleeps 2) It is modern, it is much easier to become immersed in something you know rather than something like Naruto. Hope you enjoy!
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Writing quality: β The author doesn't really give enough details and it feels more like a summary of a novel. Story development: β β Too fast paced for a story that has multiple love interest. Character design: β The main character is so bland and uncharismatic that the fact he got a harem should be impossible,and has cartoonishly one dimensional characters. Updating stability: βββββ 26 chapters a week World background:ββ Has some world building but the world being built isn't really interesting. A two stars just because of the source material/materials.
I'm too lazy to give a long and well-structured review, so I'll just say the bad things. The MC is almost a SIMP, almost because he's not a virgin groveling at the feet of women, nor does he seem desperate, but every time he comes across a woman who needs something from him, he gives it to her. So, he's a SIMP who doesn't look entirely pathetic, that doesn't make him good, but he's bearable. Now then there's Toga, he just literally just bleeds out in the middle of anywhere to give her blood, because yeah, no reason, scripted so the harem is complete, but it has no basis, other than the fact that the MC is an undead, not an immortal undead, if he takes that much damage he's going to die, he dies in Dark Souls for a reason, and he doesn't throw himself into a fight regardless of dying in any. The story has a lot of script convenience for the harem the author has in mind to come out, but it has no basis or anything for the most part, and the MC is pretty, bad? I mean, he seems like your average protagonist who has a cold attitude but always helps out in any way he can.
It's character design and development turned me off this story. Like some guy in the review section said. It's too short, it's like a summary of a novel. Its not suited for harem books. The characters are one dimensional. From what author wrote, this harem is gonna be pretty big. I think it will ruin the story because of the sheer amount of partners, they may be forgotten and remember again and again. Even if the heroines have and equal focus, we would get sick of the story not progressing. Also your writing quality is good. Peace Out