Shadow_Diamond
You have to work on your writing wuality. The grammar isnt bad but it isnt good either. You can read it but its not really good with the mistakes you made. Your main character is too unfeeling. He doesnt even really mourn the death of his parents. The interaction between the characters up to this point is also too little. I mean you introduce his aunt as the person who tells him of the death of his parents. The Floette also just pops up without explanation. His powers are too much. I mean he gets aura psychic and an additional power? I dont think u will ever use all of them to their full potential. And how did his parents know, he had the potential to learn aura and psychic. U explain to little.
Hi you can call me GC, the novel is good, he is not the protagonist or antagonist from the start, your gradually building him. at present it looks like the MC will grow as Master of all trades in Pokemon cause only researching profession is pending for him. Keep It Up.. But Need more frequent updates
Definitely quite interesting and intriguing this book has been especially the OC with how he has run his shop and met so many new pokemon as well as make and have friendships or being a part of the family with them not just that but how he actually and truly cares about all of them and the ideas that were used for all the places for the pokemon living there to use as well how they'll be safe and have freedom wonder what will happen next and what are the pokemon inside of those eggs look forward for when ur able to get the chance to continue on with this book cant wait
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