Ihilani
So, I read some chapters and I noticed some things. *take a deep breath before starting to type more... First, that is an awesome system -minus the terror, of course. But, the terror is what makes it exciting 😆 so, yeah, I love it. Second, you might want to edit some paragraphs, and break it into some sentences. Instead of using comma [ , ] continuously, try to put period [ . ] in it. You might want to find someone to check on that for you. Third, love the story 😍 yes 😍 😍😍😍 I'm looking forward to seeing some progress and of course, I wish you the best. Keep working on it, good luck ᕙ(⇀‸↼‶)ᕗ 😊😊
the story so far is pretty good as the he pass has a fast feeling while the actual progress in strength of the characters improve from how they started you can clearly see how much the have to go through inner narrative of [ system ] shows. hopefully the quality says the same as the characters grows throughout the story . hopefully this last long
First and foremost, this is the first system story I've read that's totally different. This isn't a case where the system tries to help out MC in becoming the best of the best. And with the terror involved, this is an exciting read. Writing quality - three stars. There are couple glitches here and there, a quick edit should fix that. Stability of Updates - I cannot comment on that since there are 26 chapters when I started. Story Development - 4 stars - the story is easy to follow, and not all over the place. Character design- 4 stars. World background -4 stars. Great job author!
I'm enjoying the development of the story, it's really good and I hope it only improves in the next chapters hahaha I'm looking forward to the next episodes where Matthew will start his adventure. I liked the character, it has good features .. I'm very curious about new characters and also to know more about Matthew! It's a good story. I really like it!
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ONE WORD ITS HORRIBLE!! Shame, even though apocalypse is my favorite genre, and the idea behind this story is interesting, it failed to deliver the idea in the story. GRAMMAR? HORRIBLE (LIKE REALLY HORRIBLE) SPELLINGS? QUESTIONABLE (I DONT KNOW HOW OLD THE AUTHOR IS, A CHILD PROBABLY?! 😂) And there's the MC, he is so stupid/idiot, a total lack of common sense, even though he attend at a Tech School (like really you attend a Tech School with that kind of dumb/idiotic mindset?) And author you really need to, edit your chapters, its horrible to look/read. And sorry if you feel offensive 😂, that's just how horrible it is to read your story, even though its interesting.✌✌