Krizantem
the protagonist understands that humans are selfish even the "good" ones are selfish in the end, I like how the protagonist is going so far without a lot of boring girls to tease and he, he is not a virgin or an idiot who wants to stay with the families of others and I like this lonely way of wanting to stay in the forest and everything, it would be incredible to create a domain only of magical beasts ... you are doing an incredible job if you continue like this.
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This story had a great start. The system was a little off, but could be corrected and improved over time. It did not get improved and only went downhill from there. The system seems to forget simple things. For example, it missed when the MC killed a three legged chicken and it did not update the Exp on it. It just randomly says, βyou killed enough things to hereβs a level or twoβ. The character has many loopholes and for a character that is supposed to get smarter every level, he seems to forget simple things. One time he decides to kill two mages because, βalthough they are non hostile they provide a passive threat to me that could go off anytimeβ. The problem is that the MC forgot he has this power that can make people forget things and make them have illusions. He could have just made them forget any trace of him then put them under an illusion so they canβt see him or his traces. Also the grammar is quite bad. I must say though that this story had great potential. The way the character thought was in a unique way, a way I really liked (at first). The power he had was also unique. A great book that had huge potential, that gave me more thoughts and an unique way of thinking. Poor execution though in my opinion.
Just up to chapter 85 at the moment, felt like I had to leave a review for other readers to an accurate expectation of the novel. **SPOILERS BE WARNED** The intial world background in the first 20 chapters is rather good, however there are quite a few inconsistencies that come about later on. One example of this is the specific money the exclusively use in other continents. This however, doesn't really explain what they DO use instead of this 'mage currency', or in general the setting of which normal people live. The MC later also says he can just imagine the currency into reality and yet he continues to look for his opponents money after defeating them. Another problem is how fast paced and overpowered the MC got got, sort of destroying story development as theres just not enough time to get to know the other characters well enough. Another issue is the most blatant is the characters dialogue, grammer and in general the writing. The potential of this novel is great however the bland dialogue and bland personality of side characters such as the MCs apprentices is just horrible. Just a few chapters in we got to know there specialities but that all the individuality they have. They continues to say things 'at the same time' in sync but the amount of times this has happened is just lazy writing at this point. In contrast the Mcs creations happen to be more interesting than any other character. The last issue I find is the pacing, currently the MC during chapter 85 is at the power level he should be at chapter 250, the immediate growth and powerhouse he becomes after entering the world is just offputting and feels more like a brief power short book than a actual novel. Overall the novel is subpar, it could go far however the issues involving the pacing, poor writing and lack of interesting individuals leads to a lesser than average read.
Hi! I can't write in english so i'm using google translator sorry if this gets confusing. I'm an avid reader of novels in general, a year ago I started and stopped at the last of your novel and I loved everything about it, the way you showed the world, how the story went with the protagonist's quests, I just want to say that this was all brilliant for me. I read another novel of yours and loved it too. You're the only author who makes me look up your name every month to see if any new chapters of my favorite novel come outπ I don't know why it stopped, but I want to tell you that I really enjoyed it from the beginning to the hiatus hahaha, thanks for your work !!!β€οΈβ€οΈ I think you're a writing genius, your creativity is out of this world.π―