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Sdevo994mthCommentedCh 269 Chapter 203: The Onset of War and the Momentum of Crushing_3- Sdevo996mthCommentedCh 19 Bai Yi's Advancement! Poison Crossbow Soldier's Skill!
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Says Ves is moving the goalpost when she decides to wait after screaming hysterically for a costly implant because they'll be better ones soon. She says he's always paranoid when he has saved everyone's lives multiple times. Saying he's being too dangerous when experimenting.
"You are shifting the goal posts yet again. Don't you think you are being too ambitious this time? The indigenous aliens of the Red Ocean pose the most acute threat towards us. We need to do all we can to strengthen our forces in the short term. I am not telling you that it is unwise to prepare against more distant threats as well, but we do not have the time or resources to do both at the same time." - Sdevo991yrCommentedCh 3895 Successful Experiment
- Sdevo991yrCommentedCh 3 First Mission
- Sdevo991yrCommentedCh 9 Is this ethical?
- Sdevo992yrCommentedCh 1 Prologue
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Just up to chapter 85 at the moment, felt like I had to leave a review for other readers to an accurate expectation of the novel. **SPOILERS BE WARNED** The intial world background in the first 20 chapters is rather good, however there are quite a few inconsistencies that come about later on. One example of this is the specific money the exclusively use in other continents. This however, doesn't really explain what they DO use instead of this 'mage currency', or in general the setting of which normal people live. The MC later also says he can just imagine the currency into reality and yet he continues to look for his opponents money after defeating them. Another problem is how fast paced and overpowered the MC got got, sort of destroying story development as theres just not enough time to get to know the other characters well enough. Another issue is the most blatant is the characters dialogue, grammer and in general the writing. The potential of this novel is great however the bland dialogue and bland personality of side characters such as the MCs apprentices is just horrible. Just a few chapters in we got to know there specialities but that all the individuality they have. They continues to say things 'at the same time' in sync but the amount of times this has happened is just lazy writing at this point. In contrast the Mcs creations happen to be more interesting than any other character. The last issue I find is the pacing, currently the MC during chapter 85 is at the power level he should be at chapter 250, the immediate growth and powerhouse he becomes after entering the world is just offputting and feels more like a brief power short book than a actual novel. Overall the novel is subpar, it could go far however the issues involving the pacing, poor writing and lack of interesting individuals leads to a lesser than average read.
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"Good thing you asked, pleb!" Servus 305-M spat at Servus 132-X. "It's actually, a design that I, the great--" the cocky slave suddenly paused, as if he remembered something he's not supposed to say.