Reviews of The Descendant of Avatar Aang
The Descendant of Avatar Aang
staycool1214
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At the time of this review, there were only three chapters. I can say that it is a story that promises a lot. It is not a self-insertion, or reincarnation, which on the one hand is good, as it allows the author to make use of the original script, without worrying about the butterfly effect, and to focus more on the dialogues. And if there were no good dialogues, then I would say that this story would not be worth it, after all the author will probably repeat the original events. However, there is a good dialogue and it is quite fluid. Honestly, I would prefer him to have a relationship with Isami, rather than Korra, but this is just personal taste, and taste is not in dispute. Unfortunately, there is a possibility that the author gives Mc two folds, the earth element and the air element. Be it the pressure of some idiotic readers who insist that Mc needs to be all-powerful for some reason, or because of the author's own bad taste, that he might think it's a good idea to do things like that. Well, about that, I would like to say a few things. And I hope the author reads it. And that I can make him reflect, if he has not yet made a firm decision on the matter. (If he has already decided that he will have both folds, then it won't do any good, but I tried.) Please don't destroy your story so that Mc can manipulate two different elements. Every time a fanfic author does this, it is as if he says "screw the meaning and logic of this universe, I will do whatever I want". Of course, as an author, you can do it, but at the same time, you are deconstructing any connection we have with the original avatar story. I prefer a thousand times that Mc creates a new sub-fold based on his knowledge of air bending, for example: o the dust element of Onoki (in Naruto) Explaining how it would work: It controls small particles of earth, transforming them into geometric shapes, while using the dust to trap the air inside it, so it manages to stir the molecules, heating them until they create combustion, by using the pressed oxygen. This would make Mc stand out for his pure talent, while not challenging the logic of that world. Keep up the good work.
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this fanfic is well made-up. mc bend perfectly into the story, and I like how it's going. [Waiting for the return of airbenders for him to be a dual bender 'something unheard of'] airbending + earthbending. [can make a sand storm using sandbending + airbending] wonder if he would be able to fly too like zaheer did, that would make him even stronger. I also like his interaction with others especially his family [he seems to favor his grandma toph along with his grandfather Aang more than his grandma Katara] well I hope we see him intereact with them now that he grow up [Toph, Katara, Zuko his uncle and both aunties . . . . . . ] this is a rare gem that even if there is no fight the intereaction between characters is interesting to fill up for figh scenes. I hope you continue this untim the end. [P.S : I hope Asami and Korra comes in term to share the boy, If things goes as expected, Mako being the asshole he is will end up breaking-up with Asami.] 'just my wild imagination, but hey you can't blame me for liking both Korra and Asami they ended up in Yuri thingy so why not just add Koda into the scene, in the end all three of them goes into a vacation in the Spirit world.'
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Why does not have more reviews???This is one of the best fanfics I have ever read. ππ€π€©πππ ππππππ€«πβΊπππ€ππππ€ππ€πππππ€¨π€₯ππ€©π€π€«π€ͺππ πππππΌππΈπππ€π€«πππΎππ€₯ππ€§π€§π¬ππ€πππ€€π€¨
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The author is a great writer and the original character is definitely creative. Unfortunately, the story itself is horrible. It is basically a copy of the original story, just with the addition of ONE new character and pov. The new character does not add anything to the story and can almost be considered a side character in his own story. There is no significant difference in the story to the original that it can almost be considered a summary from a different pov. At least let the new character have some impact to the story, but it has none, except for being korra's boyfriend.
