Review Detail of Alexandre_M in The Descendant of Avatar Aang
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At the time of this review, there were only three chapters. I can say that it is a story that promises a lot. It is not a self-insertion, or reincarnation, which on the one hand is good, as it allows the author to make use of the original script, without worrying about the butterfly effect, and to focus more on the dialogues. And if there were no good dialogues, then I would say that this story would not be worth it, after all the author will probably repeat the original events. However, there is a good dialogue and it is quite fluid. Honestly, I would prefer him to have a relationship with Isami, rather than Korra, but this is just personal taste, and taste is not in dispute. Unfortunately, there is a possibility that the author gives Mc two folds, the earth element and the air element. Be it the pressure of some idiotic readers who insist that Mc needs to be all-powerful for some reason, or because of the author's own bad taste, that he might think it's a good idea to do things like that. Well, about that, I would like to say a few things. And I hope the author reads it. And that I can make him reflect, if he has not yet made a firm decision on the matter. (If he has already decided that he will have both folds, then it won't do any good, but I tried.) Please don't destroy your story so that Mc can manipulate two different elements. Every time a fanfic author does this, it is as if he says "screw the meaning and logic of this universe, I will do whatever I want". Of course, as an author, you can do it, but at the same time, you are deconstructing any connection we have with the original avatar story. I prefer a thousand times that Mc creates a new sub-fold based on his knowledge of air bending, for example: o the dust element of Onoki (in Naruto) Explaining how it would work: It controls small particles of earth, transforming them into geometric shapes, while using the dust to trap the air inside it, so it manages to stir the molecules, heating them until they create combustion, by using the pressed oxygen. This would make Mc stand out for his pure talent, while not challenging the logic of that world. Keep up the good work.
The Descendant of Avatar Aang
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As it is something that could really have happened, I think it is something very cool. Perhaps one thing I would like to see more of, is a closer relationship between Lin and Koga. As an example: she showing a more affectionate and playful personality with her only son, something like that, to demonstrate that his existence changed her a lot. And, mainly, of them working together without Korra's presence. To be honest, I would just like Mc to get out of Korra's shadow a little more for a period, either to work as a police officer, or doing something relaxing like dating (if Korra doesn't be it romantic interest), or starting a company, and maybe trying something new like Act, in short, it’s up to creativity.
staycool1214:Thank you for your review, what are your thoughts on Koda being the son of Tenzin and Lin?
Alexandre_M:As it is something that could really have happened, I think it is something very cool. Perhaps one thing I would like to see more of, is a closer relationship between Lin and Koga. As an example: she showing a more affectionate and playful personality with her only son, something like that, to demonstrate that his existence changed her a lot. And, mainly, of them working together without Korra's presence. To be honest, I would just like Mc to get out of Korra's shadow a little more for a period, either to work as a police officer, or doing something relaxing like dating (if Korra doesn't be it romantic interest), or starting a company, and maybe trying something new like Act, in short, it’s up to creativity.
how about giving mc energy/spirit bending since the energy bending in the original series is a bit vague, you can take creative liberties with it!!!! and it doesn't clash with the whole "one person one element" you can make it that energy bending has a buffing effect or something and so much more (and the power leveling of energy bending would be completely under your control) plus it's energy bending, it gotta be cool and mc can acquire it in a reasonable way, or just use the whole "affinity" troupe
staycool1214:Thank you for your review, what are your thoughts on Koda being the son of Tenzin and Lin?
how about giving mc energy/spirit bending since the energy bending in the original series is a bit vague, you can take creative liberties with it!!!! and it doesn't clash with the whole "one person one element" you can make it that energy bending has a buffing effect or something and so much more (and the power leveling of energy bending would be completely under your control) plus it's energy bending, it gotta be cool and mc can acquire it in a reasonable way, or just use the whole "affinity" troupe
staycool1214:Thank you for your review, what are your thoughts on Koda being the son of Tenzin and Lin?
and I also recommend that you my favourite legend of Korea fanfic, it's called "somebody that I used Tahno" read it and you will never run out of inspiration 😃 (also if you do end up using this advice please give sum credit to the author of that fic) I like last Airbender more than legend of Korra but the story of legend of korra has a better potential when it comes fanfics
staycool1214:Thank you for your review, what are your thoughts on Koda being the son of Tenzin and Lin?
staycool1214:Thank you for your review, what are your thoughts on Koda being the son of Tenzin and Lin?