Darkwolf280
Not a whole fan of systems especially when a cultivation sect background is already established, being a sect leader should be enough. Honestly a lazy way of quantifying power levels. Grammar is alright. It's readable but there are a few areas where it uses the wrong tenses. A tip for writers who don't have english as their primary language (this is also helpful for primary english writers) Read your work out loud and ask yourself if it sounds right and if you don't know refer to other stories with decent grammar. Overall not for me.
I have mixed feelings about this. It’s basically a typical wuxia edgelord mc in a ( for now ) relatively normal marvel world. And although that creates some funny interactions and is generally nice to read, if his mindset doesn’t change it would get boring. For example, he tells Felicia ( the first love interest ) to never trust anybody, never show your true feelings and emotions to someone, etc. and if he continues to act like that it wouldn’t be that much different from your typical wunxia edgelord story. Basicly, really good read for now, huge potential but could go down the train
To The Author, Kindly continue the novel Make the MC an Anti-Hero with Full Solid Black Assassin Suit with best material, A Master of All Things in everthing beyond any level we can imagine - Magic( Rune, Wizardry, Sorcery, etc.,) Martial Art( Chi, Cultivator and varies combat Arts) Science(Inventor, Scientist, Engineer) and many more things to Mastery. Make him the best in intellect(Science) and Combat Arts In level beyond the level even Bruce Wayne can't imagine. Make Mutants into Meta-Humans. Also, Keep the Characters from Both Western and Eastern Heroes from Comics and already known characters. Hope to see these soon! Thanks! Reader.
bro the premise and story is good. but the issue is the main characters personality. dudes legit a edge lord chinese protaganist who are legit the worst type of protaganists. like come on, unless your some depressed person who doesnt even know what gender he is the average person does not like this type of mc. its weird how marvel or dc fanfics the mc is always either a edgelord or mega simp. like i feel like the authors for these fics dont really have good social standing as this is not how normal people act in either extreme.
It's great and I like it. Even though it's have cultivation - which I hate with passion. But it's have something more that most cultivation stories lacked - fun. And that's most important. P. S. The only nitpick that I have. Mc character could really turn in unexpected direction ,when beautiful girls concerned. I do enjoy harems, so I wouldn't complain much. But still, it's could be quite forced when author have a need.
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