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I apologize. I forgot webnovel readers are bots who five star anything and everything. Sorry for any accusations

tldr: Mid and personally below average fan fic. It's high rating is deceiving, it does not match it's rating score. What a catastrophic first chapter. I was curious why the MC would choose Owari no seraph as his world of choice aside from the whims of the author but the introduction was so terrible that it does not fit the 4.94 rating this story has. Either the author is deleting one star reviews or the story got much better later on but I doubt it. The story is rushed, so the choices of the MC though from an empathetic view makes sense, to readers it's abrupt and stupid. Especially the fact that he gained his memories 8 years after he 'reincarnated' but then needed another 4 years to active the functions of his system just so there could be needless drama with saving his sister??? The kicker here is, after forcing the system to activate he has to wait an additional 4 years meaning it would only be after 8 years that he'd have full functionality. Talk about forced. You might as well have time skipped all of this non-sense and start where you wanted the main story to be set with flashbacks or monologues of what happened in the past four years. Or leave it as a mystery until later on. Very poorly handled.

Overall great writing quality. There's a solid pace in relation to the main characters abilities and their influence in the world. The world building itself is nice, branching out to different areas of the marvel universe rather than staying solely confined to the United States. The biggest link I would say is the "romance". It was abrupt and honestly nonsensical. You took the time to build up other aspects of your story but decide to rush this part. Either dedicate more chapters next time and get better with experience or don't include it at all. Though, most will probably just hate the selection you made, which while unique, seems to be chosen solely for that reason and nothing else considering the plethora of candidates you can choose from which can contribute more in power and influence, but I guess that's not what love is huh? Who knows, still the weakest link. Fun story, will watch out for future updates.

So what's the reasoning as to why someone who has worked with a person for many years/decades place trust on a random person they met I'm assuming once in their life. Sure they're a super genius on the rise but the risk to reward ratio is not there.

tldr: Overall I've enjoyed it. There are irks for average viewers. Transitions between plots could use work. But the characters are active, the plot interesting, and the dialogue is fun. Personally I've enjoyed the novel. While the novel does have some irks most people wouldn't tolerate and a lot of irks that an average webnovel reader wouldn't enjoy such as attempts at character development, drama, non-gary su character, etc etc, it is at least of higher quality than other garbage on this platform. A few critiques I do have is slow down a bit and give a chapter or two to build up to certain events. Monologues here, conversations there, perspective changes, introspection all around. The story feels like it's hopping from one idea to another and though I can see the direction and reasoning in my run-through it was abrupt and to most, out of place/forced.

I understand drinking is his vice and its practically in his blood at this point to be a reckless drunk but you would imagine that for a man who advocates for improving day by day and his recent self-introspection he would stop drinking. You've used it 3-4 times so far and this point it's getting tiresome. You give him character development for his other flaws but choose to ignore one of his most glaring flaws (He himself has seen and felt the consequences of being drunk; ) so you can use it as a plot device.

Scenes were pretty hot, characters and interactions are interesting. Fun read so far ch.12 This was unexpected. The overall gist of the novel is, world was reversed and now its a matriarchy instead of a patriarchy social values and all. Reminds me of a lot of r18 Japanese novels back in the day but this one had better qualities to it per say. The main character isn't described (unless I missed it, I blame it on this second part I'm going to mention) and the protagonist is not likeable in the first chapter. But he does show some growth I suppose. He starts getting a backbone somewhat but honestly what makes me rate this fairly high is the scenes were good, more character descriptions would make it a lot better. The little analysis of social values towards both genders was also pretty interesting, I thought it was nice, didn't have that woke vibe to it so it wasn't unbearable. Keep it up.

Look I'm a huge sucker for overlord stories and I've read most if not all overlord fan fics that come through here and other sites but this one does not have the same essence/vibe. From the start the grammar is noticeable with misspellings everywhere as well as the general writing style being cringe. I couldn't get past the first two short chapters of the story. Tldr: immediate sense from the first few chapters the story is going to be at best mid and dropped.

It's a case of the writing is 'grammatically correct' but they don't bounce from one sentence to another. "Lie Fan and Sun Tzu began squabbling about who's right and wrong until Lie Fan admit defeat due to his brain cells not enough to argue with an advanced futuristic entity" The beginning part is okay, it flows well but when it reaches 'until Lie Fan admit defeat" and onward it disrupts the previous flow. It should be "Lie Fan and Sun Tzu began squabbling about/on who's right and wrong until Lie Fan admitted defeat, unable to keep up with this futuristic entity." Advanced is pretty much synonymous with futuristic so you don't need to double stack it. There's also problems with tenses here and there Original: "After checking the Status window and a bit of daydreaming when he conquers all of china and become(s) emperor Lie Fan remember something important that happens every time at novels with a system " Revised: "After checking the Status window and daydreaming of conquering all of china as emperor Lie Fan, he remembered something important that happens concerning novels and systems" The problem isn't solely the minor errors here and there but the case of appearing every now and then. It disrupts reading flow and bugs out reader's automatic correction in their brains.

Brain hurty. Hard to read. Rather than using grammarly just use chat.gpt much better for flow. Grammarly only fixes grammatical structure, spelling, and maybe vocabulary enhancement but chat.gpt should be able to make it flow a lot better. Other than that from what I've read so far I don't think this is worth chat gpting but good luck.

It's pretty much a Chinese version of a Scotsman. He's loud, honest, abrasive, and a jerk which is okay for the most part. What I do find rather off putting is he's quick to sexually assault other characters and other characters never negatively react to it because he's scottish? You could try and justify that he's 15 and it makes sense for him to do that but character reactions who are much older and should have pride should not be reacting that way, it's rather off putting. Then there's the blatant racism against Japanese because Japanese people are simps and scottish people are the 'supreme chads' of the world. Cringe. I pretty much stopped as the Scotsman supremacy tangent got too much and when after he won a duel he starts SA'ing these two other characters who were infatuated with this hero and all of a sudden after a few words and the assault they're okay with it and are considering to be a part of his harem. Overall the story got too cringy for me and reminded me too much of other Chinese novels. Ended Ch. 19 out of 21.

Since it's based on another work, league of legends, I don't think they can monetize the novel on the original page. It is a translation though, and I can respect the time the translator took to translate, two chapters is two chapters 🤷‍♂️

The story is your generic overlord fanfiction along with inevitable droppage. Honestly it isn't too bad, it's readable in a grammatical sense, but the voice/narration used in the story is terrible. "Welcome to the 11th floor of Nazarick, or as I like to call it, my super cool crib. Seriously, everything you see here is a result of my wild imagination from that big red moon hanging out in the sky like it owns the place to the palace that screams "Vampires rule!" Why stick to just training and being all serious when you can have fun, right? Gotta keep those thoughts of tomorrow at bay somehow." I know each author has their own writing style but constantly talking to your readers like this is off putting and unbearable. Don't write like this unless you know what you're doing.

Caught up with the latest release, chapter 280. Great novel. Push through it and you will find yourself with a diamond

Ch. 160 Story really kicks into 5th gear. Exciting read.