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I would say the story should have a dark tag it's pretty dark and depressing not something u would want to read after waking up in the morning, ......

Well this is my general view of my book. I was honestly suprised when someone wrote they like my work. It is so boring to fill the 140 characters...

Amazing so far I have no complaints Yup yup yeah yeah I yes yup yeah yeah I yes yup yeah yeah I yes yup yup yeah yeah I yes yup yup yeah yeah I yes yea yup yeah yeah yea yea I yup yea yup yup yeah I

Hahaha its a good fanfic although at first its pretty much confusing and depressing and dark. But after chapter 5 onwards or it gets better from Crysis world onwords and its interesting as MC from dumb become somewhat inteligent hahaha

Should have the teg "Dark", it spoiled my mood. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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Not a lot of video game fanfics on this site so five stars from.****************************************************************************

Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.

I am geek and i can understand the power and characters, but for normal person this story will look very strange. I don't want to make some spoiler for new readers, but if you know what is wiki you can read it easy.

the story is alright but all over the place with consistent plot holes with really ehh characters, the Mc feels like an edgy kid who most times says something cringy. it feels like there's no true struggle throughout the worlds he's traveling to. the Witcher had his powered sealed for just a few chapters to then unlock and basically makes the whole Witcher trials and relevant. then talking about revolutionizing the world with alien tech and modern tech just ruins the whole world placement. character constantly talks about wanting a vacation and rest but suddenly he thinks about world domination or changing the whole world. all together the story didn't lead me feeling wanting for more or any sense of excitement to know what happens next. But good luck author even though I didn't like it doesn't mean other won't.

5/5

i love this fanfic

The plot isn't that good. I am not here for the plot so it's fine. Main chad is unique and the chad development has an artistic touch that can be hardly found elsewhere beside Jesus. 1 out of 5 for the story

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Tambahkan ulasan Kualitas menulis Memperbarui Stabilitas Pengembangan Cerita Desain karakter latar belakang dunia Tarif Keseluruhan 5.0 Ulasan harus lebih dari 140 karakter

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Congratulation You made it

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This is a fun little story to read. I am actually kinda disappointed it's on hiatus

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