So_Sa
- Review as of 20 chapters in: This is a transmigration system novel in a cultivation world that is ruled by sects. Our mc Is transmigrated into a 14 year old boy called Kai, who is a slave with nothing to his name and gets a system. Now unlike most systems I dont find it to be too op or broken yet, Which personally I like. Makes the mc seem more vulnerable, relatable and allows for growth. What does his system do you may ask? Read it and find out. •Writing Quality• Author has the occasional grammatical errors, however as an avid reader I read very quickly and build an idea of what is going on in my head therefore Isn’t noticable for me. The way author lays out system status is very nice and easy to read. •Story development• Unlike most sect creation novels, mc doesn’t (or has yet to) produce anything out of thin air such as a sect building. This gives the novel a nicer, slower pace than other sect building novels. This seems like a novel where we will see the mc work his way up step by step and toil away to build his sect. I say this because the Author might have foreshadowed mc becoming an alchemist in order to secure funds to operate his sect. Furthermore, bare in mind mc is only 14 years old. I imagine most sect leaders are much older than this and therefore may be quite a while before we see any actual sect development. However there are already signs of the mc’s first disciples, which is a good start. •World background• Author does a good job of slowly introducing the background world and not info dumping everything all at once. It also helps that mc knows almost nothing as well so as he learns we learn with him. All in all this looks like a novel with a lot of potential and was something I enjoyed reading. I wish that there were more chapters, so thanks author looking forwad to see what happens next 👍🏼✨
qi in this fic is pretty much omnipotent and more unreasonable than Chinese fics. mc is pretty stupid and his reason to become strong is trash when dont even have a family. his reason to want have have a sect make even less sense. we can t forget how he help a girl and boy he know for less than a week and only caused trouble for him with this we can see what type of naive and stupid character he is and we can even use the excuse that is for character development because in his previous lives he already suffered in the hand of his family so if even after that he dont learn anything you can see how forced it is.
Hello, Humble Author of this novel (See how I didn't give myself a 5 star?... very humble!). Thanks to everyone taking the time to read my story. If you enjoy it and want to help me make it better, I'd appreciate letting me know about any mistakes in grammar or inconsistencies. This is my first novel and English isn't my main language so please go easy on me lol. There are quite a few obvious tropes but it's bound to be like that since I write stories that I enjoy reading...I will release bulk chapters in the beginning however at around chapter 20, it will become one per day as that would catch up to my writing speed.
So yeah I'm not gonna go into details because someone else already did but I just wanna say that you should really read this book if you're looking for a real sect development story with little to no cliche and above all a slow and steady story instead of a fast paced one where mc becomes op just in 2 chapters. yeah so that was a little long but who cares. continue like this author you're doing a great job.
Flaw after flaw and cliche after cliche MC has ez system but still can't sit in one place and get strong enough not to be squashed first before moving. Unnecessary, unrealistic chats bw people. Says one thing to do or not do but slaps himself in the face next chapter. Very first example - Huang city was massive and has loads a low lvl body cultivator but it didn't have any low level hunting ground nearby ? Is it logically posible that sooo many people unnecessary live in a town where they won't earn ? Nop writing by making shopkeeper and such characters act arrogant in front of hunters not realistic (just from firsttown some ) Same kept repeating later i tried to get into some more and just some more chaps but these common sense holes don't stop[img=faceslap]
so I'm not much of a reviewer I've maybe done 2 other reviews, I don't got much to say it's great so far the best story I have found in the cultivation genre and almost the best I've found in general. I like this one a lot more though I've decided to dedicate my power stones to this and so should you it's worth it, so much so that I doubt you can find a proper reason not to.
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