I've read all the free chapters of this book and what i got from it all , is that this book is entertaining but also very lacking.
First, the pros :
- The characters' interactions are good.
-The MI is funny yet mysterious.
- The plot is interesting and it seems to promise more than what was said in the synopsis.
- The pace is nor quick nor slow .
-The fl makes good use of her future knowledges.
- The author's updates are rather constant and the writing is ok.
Then, the cons :
- The Fl was poorly designed.
First, her relationship with her past-timeline husband.
I know she's been hurt by him. But why is it that it isn't shown?
What i mean is that the author only tells us that she wants revenge yet the fl's lack of negative feelings makes us think otherwise.To truly believe in her thirst for revenge, we must feel that fl is emotionally invested in her revenge. And this goes through seeing her actions , reactions and negative feelings when she faces the architects of her downfall.
But the author has done nothing of
the sort.
Moreover , the author could have created a contrast between Mc's past
feelings and her present ones . After all, she used to love the man so much and only recently( just before she died in the past timeline) had she learnt that he had been cheating on her the whole time with her half-sister. So just how come she passed so quickly from love to hate ? And what hate ? She basically doesn't care about him( can
someone pass so quickly from love to
indifference; did she even really love him?)and only wants revenge on her half sister while that ex-husband of hers is as guilty as her.
Second,the FI/ Mc is not that
smart.Seriously, that chapter where she played dumb before another noble lady just to slap that lady's face wasn't satisfying . She was supposed to look smart but the way she chose to deal with things just made the whole face slapping underwhelming. If anything , Mc doesn't seem that smart(which is not a problem as long as the book doesn't force us to see her as a genius).
Another problem i have with this FI (and with most of romance novels' Fls) is that apart from avenging herself , she doesn't have a goal nor any other motivation in life.
lf i had to resume her personality, she would be a sympathetic and mysterious girl that would have been a good side character in another character's story , if not for the fact that she possesses two blessings.
- The grammar is lacking.
The first chapter was perfect( at least, i didn't spot any mistake or problem). Yet in the second chapter, all this care was nowhere to be seen. And the situation was the same with the other chapters.Overall, the errors aren't
so much that they can deter one from
reading the book. But still, they hinder the reading experience ( some paragraphs are strangely structured or some sentences are incomprehensible ).
- The pay wall.
If anything, the pay wall appears too quickly for me.
Recently on this platform, authors start to lock chapters under the 50 chapters bar (and often , like with this book, under the 30 chapters bar) and i think , as a reader, that it's a bummer.
First , with this little number of
chapters , there is a greater chance to be disappointed , because we do not know the characters and the story enough.
Second,the chapters are locked so quickly yet the quality of writing displayed by this author( and
some others authors on this platform) is not that good.
Plus, it gives the idea that authors
are only interested in readers' money and do not care about producing a quality content.
All in all, this book is a big disappointment and it sadens me even more that in this review section, no one has talked about what was good and what was bad about it but rather, just stated that it was amazing.
Finally, author, i pray for your
improvement and hope that my review wasn't too harsh.As for others author that might read this review, please think as a reader when you write. We know you have your difficulties but we have ours too. So please make quality content and we will gladly pay
for more.
