I am overpowered

[Newbie gift opened

The eye space and time(would change the host eye color due to it)

Eye of void

Immortal body

Six element affinities spiritual root (grade :??????)

Primordial Void scripture

Transcendent soul mantra.

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"Yesss!!!!" I was so happy that I screamed out physically.

"Oops!,that was close I could have been caught and maybe they will think I gone mad for not have a high grade spirit root"

{By the way, I remembered that I have a pocket dimension,I should receive my newbie gift there. }

"System transfer me to my pocket dimension and start the process".

Boom,I was inside my pocket dimension but before I could inspect the pocket dimension, I fell on my back and before I knew what happened,I was hit with an enormous pain in my head.

It felt like my body and soul was turned down and was being reconstructed again not mention all my five senses being clouded.

"Argghhhhhhh" I was literally screaming my soul out.

Mass wave of spiritual energy rushed into my body destroying and helping reconstruct my physique.

Good thing there was nobody to here witness what was happening to my body if not that person would be scared so silly that he or she would refuse to cultivate ever again.

THIRD PERSON POV

You could what was happening to Ye chen body which was constantly being smushed and built all over again accompanied with his soul tearing screams which was resounding in the pocket dimension.

At one time his voice could not be heard cause his vocal cord have been destroyed.

His eye could be seen which was devoid of any emotion.

And again his vocal cords were reconstructed as he continued to scream.

It was a bone chilling torturous sight to behold.

First person POV

{I am tired,I feels like forever I don't think I can't continue like this,my father was right maybe I am a failure.

I want to prove everyone wrong and I want to show that I am strong so that none of would mess with

I don't wanna be tied down to a particular place,I want to be strong enough to venture the whole world and never be weak and all I want to be the strongest in the universe.}

Days,weeks and months passed in the pocket dimension but not a single hour has passed outside.

I was currently sitting crossed legged in the my dimension space hovering above the surface cause ever since the complete transformation my body refuse to touch the surface and there is nothing I can do about it.

The primodial void scripture allow me to absorb qi from the void and it change my constitution.

It will also help me to understand the aspect of void better when I get to the law seed stage

My whole hair is completely black and deep dark and my eye represent the mass of darkness and nothingness of the void which seems to be able to devour one's soul.

And my aura is almost impossible to identify because of the void attributes.

Also the transcendent soul mantra is to help assist my soul cultivation.

This world is full of danger,something can happen unexpectedly which can put you in danger.

Apart from that I have to get to the nascent soul stage before I am qualified to cultivate the mantra, well that a bummer.

At least it better than nothing.

I really want to scream out that I am overpowered.

..............

Five minutes later

[Ding! congratulation host for breaking through to the eighth stage of qi condensation]

"Finally broke through, I wonder how jealous those self-proclaimed genius would be."

"I AM OVERPOWERED"

"Phew finally got that out of my chest"

*victory laugh(kind of creepy though)*

"Can't wait to see their miserable face after I show them my cultivation"

"But I have to come up with an excuse for them not to be suspicious of me"

AFTER THREE HOURS OF THINKING

"Ha, I can tell them that I was suddenly transported into an unknown space and I met an immortal expert who said I have a high affinity with him therefore, he took me as his disciple and he taught me several techniques and he helped change my body constitution and upgraded my spiritual root"

I just hope they believe it if not I am toast.

Well let that be for now

"STATUS" I said in my mind.

[STATUS

Name: ye chen

Age : five

Cultivation: Qi condensation(5th stage)

Cultivation technique:

Spirit root: six elemental spiritual root(grade:unknown)

Physique:immortal physique (The owns the physique would stop aging after the age of sixteen and thou who owns this physique shall be immortal but that does not mean thou ye can't die if he strength is weak)

SKILLS

(None)

Abilities Pocket dimension(grade:unknown)

Infinitely fast psychic processing (grade:unknown)

Creation(Sealed)

Eye of space time(ability:unknown)

Eye of void(ability unknown)

SHOP

New section.

]

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After

Reading my own webnovel,I saw where I made alot of mistakes that makes the novel enjoyable to the readers.

Some of this problem are

Bad grammar

Spelling error

Unexciting scene

So fast paced

Unplanned event

Lack of words

Mismatch of information.

When I started, I was writing for fun and benefit and after that it shifted to the experience and later I started being passionate about writing it.

For one thing I wrote this novel on a whim,nothing was planned out as I never expected to be passionate about writing.

So I am gonna drop this novel,take a step back and carefully plan and outline my next novel to fit perfection,so thanks for all the views.

Although,I am dropping this,I will try to update it to continue polishing up my skills.

And also thanks for the views.

So peaceout