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1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read that wrong too 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wandering why you are still reading this 8. You saw that mistake, right? (On 7) 10. But did you see that I skipped 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 9 12. I said "saw you" not you saw 13. I also skipped 2 14. You got tricked 15. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading!
I read till chapter 72, and i think i can't go further . When i started reading this , i had high hopes. The reasons were : - The pretty good writing( nothing revolutionary but definitly better than most books out there.) - The many possibilities of developement for the plot - The fact that the transition from a cowardly character to a confident one for the Mc was well done. - Although this novel takes some elements of another( bloodline system, which is not so great either) , it slowly finds its own way. - The other voice of the system which added a layer of mystery . But that was all. And some point, as time goes by, one find himself/ herself unable to continue because some problems are too obvious to be ignored : - The pace is horribly slow. It is not a bad thing per se . However when NOTHING substential happens to the Mc , it just makes the book boring. - What is even the Mc 's motivation? So far i don't see one. Him not having any clear ambition makes it so he doesn't go beyond the " i'm an author's good idea " to become a " i'm an author's good idea who works because I FEEL REAL " . Harry is an Mc because the author made him so. If he was a side character in some other book , People wouldn’t even care about him , because he is not interesting. This applies to other characters as well. So far , none of them seems a little bit interesting or real. - The story doesn't progress and it feels like there are no dangers or difficulties for the Mc(A competition is approaching but there's no tension at all ). The world building isn't doing much better , as it is nothing new and we don't even know that much about the world yet. - The author's writing is also a problem. Although the grammar and the vocabulary are good( it's nothing extraordinary but it's better than most of the novels on this app), the author has a serious issue with emotions. The tension, the fear , the sadeness... it's like the author has troubles showing emotions. It is not so evident in the earlier chapters. But as one goes further , it is more and more glaring. That's why every interactions feels so inconsistent and not relatable at all. Besides , i myself do not like it when the Mc dwells on sadness and regrets. But the author could have shown at least that Harry( even though he said the contrary) deep down, cares for his family. It should have been shown( or told ) a bit that it hurts him that they didn’t even searched for him when he moved out . What i mean is that the author could have add some complexity to the characters' emotions which would help making them appear real and human-like. Moreover, the chapters aren't that long . 72 chapters appears to be a lot but it isn't ( for that book). Overall, this novel isn't bad but just average . I'm so disappointed because so much more could have been done .
It is unfortunatly very bland. after mc initially fights back against bullies after getting stronger he just doesn't do anything... based on his background he should be filled with anger and thoughts of revenge.. but nope. nothing. everyone who bullied him, teachers who ignored it, parents who underfed and completely ignored him, brother who despised him. nothing. no mention of his emotions/plans. Additionally, there is no drive to grow stronger quicker by seeking out opportunities to absorb mana from people (bullies would be the prime targets, and he could do it outside of school avoiding the excuse of a teacher detecting it) or by getting his hands on beast cores. mc is content with living a normal school life and working a normal part time job to pay the rent. thus we just get normal school arc, taking classes, small duels and stuff. all this while an actual tournament arc is looming in the distance, which I cant imagine will be any better. Bland is the best word I can think of to describe it. With that said, the premise and writing quality is good and the story is by no means irredeemable if author better explores the emotional side of the mc. Either by having him use his newfound powers to get revenge (I feel like it would be reasonable for a kid in his situation to let the power get a little bit to his head and walk down a darker path) or by clearly motivating to the reader why this isn't happening, maybe he is struggling with such feelings but is able to hold the back.