Lua_Kai
The first chapter of this book is a great example of how to capture a reader's attention. I had great pleasure with the author's style and artistry. The story is not an easy one. The world is pretty seriously described, but it's a magical realism, it's not a superficial tale for easy reading. The plot is good, I miss the sharp, powerful igtriga! I hope the author can create an unexpected twist in the plot to make the story even more attractive. Thanks for the creativity! Good luck.
I really hope this writer enters the limelight. His work is just superb from the word choices to the story build up to the characters who are all complex yet understandable. I loved every minute spent reading this work and hope that it doesn't stop soon or, go premium soon because I'm broke and just relying on fast passes lol. Good Job and keep it up Author!
The first chapter did a good job of pulling you in and it's exactly what you think immortality would be like. I feel for the mc living that long. Yeah, there is a lot of things you can do, but after a couple of hundred years, it's all just on permanent repeat. The world building is good so far, some of the second chapter seems rushed but it's not necessarily a bad thing. There are a few places where the wrong word is used/misspelled. Nothing that distracts from full immersion and nothing that a once over later won't fix. Overall, good story so far. Keep up the good work!