Reviews of In Avatar World With Naruto System
In Avatar World With Naruto System
Dr_Chad
- Overall Rate
- Writing Quality
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- Story Development
- Character Design
- world background
A top knotch novel which has only a single problem....too few chapters. The character is cool and not a beta male,there is less action but it is managable with the story. Good luck and dont drop!!
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Actually interesting, seeing as how u've upgraded the avatar world to match naruto skill-sets...still, the sharigan, sage mode, lightening body, six gate, and the rest of the hax **** in naruto shouldnt be added, that was stupid...but GL, u will need it cause they hax ****. interested to see how u'll over come this and what you will do. As for story, its interesting, but too soon I guess, hopefully u wont make MC a retard, follow cannon cast or be some heroic *****...suggestions: add ur own ****, make the world larger, the spirit world could be some **** like las noches?. Add alchemly from F.M.A...it could be like a unique **** that non benders with high chi can do?, IDK, bending elements is weak against naruto ****, so maybe give some other **** to the avatar people. Any relationship build it. I still think its stupid considering how vastly different the worlds are in power [despite u equalizing it cause naruto has hax ****], but it is interesting..so GL I guess. interested to see what u do **: the first review shall remain as a fk u
EstΓ‘ bastante buena la verdad, mΓ‘s de lo que esperaba, a puesto bien las cosas de Naruto en el avatar world (Al menos hasta el 15, los capΓtulo que hay de estΓ‘ reseΓ±a) pero quizΓ‘s lo estΓ‘s chetando un poquito demasiado rΓ‘pido es decir tiene 11, y ni siquiera ha salido de la naciΓ³n fuego, si sigue a ese ritmo la trama de avatar no le va poder seguir el ritmo, aquΓ se puede hacer, inventarte weas propias, el mundo se los espΓritus, o cosas de otros mundos y system o directamente un poco de todo, y si tuviera que quejarme de algo simplemente solo 15 caps pero eso con el tiempo. A mantenido bastante bien la esencia de los de avatar y a hecho cambios acordΓ© y adecuados en ellos y eso es todo.
So far it has not been disappointing, i really hope more in this novel. But one thing i really pay attention to, most novels of this type will be very easy to drop, i really hope that the author will stick to his stance. If it is going to be dropped, it's better to stop throwing away the time readers are hoping for in this novel. Whatever it is will always support you, and also i suggest opening your patreon website. Keep up the passion for writer-san.
First of all i love your work absalutly no hate here But You know i do not want to be that guy but i have to be By giving him all that your just writings your self into a whole which you cant claw your way out of U could have made do with tayjutsu nad biyakugan and he stil would be as op you as want and not break the world Shrigan is a hax, six path is a hax,
To the Author, this is your novel, you're creating a vision of a world to your own bidding, this is your art, don't mind the haters, you're doing great just by making this and making people happy, although not everyone, nevertheless a virtuous act. Keep it up, you have supporters like me behind you, I look forward to more of this work of yours. P. S. This is but a mere wish of mine... I WANT MOAR CHAPSSSSS
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Okay, first of all let's talk about writing quality, grammar, structure and things like that are pretty good overall, I believe that anyone in the seventh or eighth grade can read this, although there is room for improvement. The story is developing in a pretty weird slow manner, some chapters doesn't even seen to make the story progress to tell the truth, this needs to change or improve since there is too many irrelevant information being written. As for character design it's ok I guess, he is like me, you or any other common boy you could think of, however It looks like his time inside the world didn't changed his character at all, which doesn't makes too much sense for me, considering his new background he should have at least gotten a little bit more serious I believe. Update stability, all I can say is that if the author didn't write so many irrelevant information in some chapters it would be a 5 stars for it instead of a 4, the way things are currently it would be better if he could publish one more chapter per day. As for the world, I think its being well developed for now, but its too early to say anything, let's see if the author will continue to explain aspects of the world and show them happening instead of simply telling us readers about it. Conclusion: 4/5 this is an above average fanfic, the main character is interesting, his powers are developing well and he doesn't feels like a broken character (YET), his relationship with the other characters need a little bit more of development since in 15 chapters it looked like he forgot his childhood friend which is weird for me, and there's even the fact that his parents aren't that present in the story. The canon characters seems to be well represented and they are what you would expect, which is good, since the author didn't changed their identity for a stupid reason like some fics do such as the Harry Potter ones that makes Dumbledore the villain, I'm completely hook by the possiblities of this story and I hope the author won't do a Harem, but in case its inevitable, please author remember to limit it to 2/3 girls, or boys, idk, your story, aheeem..., too many girls ruins the story and please make the way their relationship develops be something credible, love is something that takes time to form and it can't be rushed. Also don't limit the main character, with his powers and abilities he could be anything, even the conqueror of the world, just do remember to make sure that his actions are in accordance to his dreams/objectives/motivations. Good luck author, I don't know if you have, but if you don't, you should create a patron, your fic has the required potential.
