Reviews of HIATUS: The Inheritance of the 3 sannins

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I will be completely honest, the first volume of your story seemed interesting and entertaining to read, I liked the rhythm of the story, it is true that there was a point that became a bit tedious, but it was understandable by the development you wanted to give to each character, even if they would later be discarded (like the protagonist's grandfather). The problem arises from the second volume, and some details that were not followed up or made any sense (for example, what happened to Marcus and the other soldiers who were called by Bernard? Or why did the protagonist make such dangerous decisions?) , I honestly think that these details happened to want to advance the rhythm with which the story was developed, and to be able to lead the protagonist to be in stupid situations (taking into account that the protagonist had the knowledge of Orochimaru and Jiraya, both highly trained and experienced). Personally, I did not like the relationship between Natasha and Bucky at all, and even caused me a rejection, but don't get me wrong, I can understand your decision to want to differentiate yourself from the other novels by not putting such a cliche love interest. Although, you should have deepened and developed more the relationship that those two people had (Here, I consider that your problem was the rhythm that your novel was having, if you had continued with the rhythm that you had in the first volume, you would not have had so many opinions rejecting your idea). Finally, I understand the reason why you accelerated the pace of your novel, and the reason for the details that I do not like. To clarify, the points that I do not like about your novel are, first, the little development that there is in the second volume, and second, the decisions or forced subplots for a development of some event. The cause of me stopping reading your story is the hasty pace of your novel, which causes your story to have plots, and relationships between characters so robotic. I hope you take my opinion positively, and it will serve you in a future project.

Its really good! I just wanted to know if you intend to give the Mc some other powers? Because there are a lot of them in the mcu (all the serums, mutations, magic, etc.)

It feels kinda stale now and stagnates on the mc’s progress. Most if these events feel unnecesary and out if place. I am dropping for now but hope it gets better in the future.

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It was fine until the MC took an Orochimaru like approach to deal with problems. He also added unnecessary layers of complexity to the story just to make things seem smart. They instead come across as jumbled and convoluted. From the reanimation arc things really fall apart.

The MC isnt even the MC anymore its all of the random marvel characters beaides the mc and if the mc does appear in the chapter all he does is tel someone else to do something.... story is so boring

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3 sanins says the title but he is a mini Orochimaru wannabe...after grandfathers death its goes down real quick ...more of a mad siencist kinda vibe with control problems...

This book is just so so boring to read... i Have read to chapter 22 and nothing actually happen... had this been an priginal type novel that would be fine as there is a lot of thing to build up, But this is a godanm fanfic.. if you are trying to sleep but cant, this fanfic right here is the solution... a bunch of pointless Pov, no action. Just plain boring...

It’s just plain boring. I made it to ch 16 and nothing interesting has happened so far. Chapters are also very short and some of them aren’t worth reading. Why write chapters from his grandpas POV if ur just gonna kill him immediately. Makes no sense.

Everything that is from marvel is good but we need to see how the author will make a development in the story because even if he has the 3 legendary sannins inheritance it's still the marvel world but I think with Orochimaru's intelligence he might create a kind of serum and please author don't limit yourself in earth there are other planets. Overall it's good and there's still room for improvement.

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If you asked me before the end of vol 3 I would have given this a higher rating but where the novel is currently it not good even before the start of vol 4 the MC was slowly being phased out being regulated to poping into a chapter for a quick scene of him telling someone to do something then never being heard from again till his next cameo. Vol 4 is pretty much a different book his disciples are all the MC now and some other side characters if I had to give vol a title it Ava of the Galaxy or Agents of Grant along with some beginning Doctor Strange starring Ancient One and Kaccelius.

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From the second volume the plot began being forced, the Mc made stupid decisions nothing to do with how Orochimaru would think, besides that I do not like a mc similar to Orochimaru that honestly did not deserve forgiveness in the anime

I agree don't drop , don't know why people love it one min , then have all this hate. Kinda like they think it's always gonna be rainbows and butterflies. That their problem. Don't drop

I want to state the the novel would be given 4 stars by me. The reason I gave 5 stars is cause of the cover page. I didn't stop laughing for like 8 minutes after viewing it.