Zeruna
So I accidentally stumbled across this story when I slowly dropped down the rabbit hole that is WebNovel. I'm giving it a straight-up 5 out of 5 because I have no clue what the hell I just read but others seem to like it? Through out most of the story, I found myself laughing my ass off at just how ridiculous everything was. The story holds nothing back which I love. Of course, if you are looking for a deep meaningful story this definitely isn't the place. The writing is over the top and silly, and sometimes down write insane. But that's just what I like in a story. :)
Can't really say much more than that the amount of misspelling and grammatical errors in the very first chapter makes me want to run the other way. If the writing gets better in later chapters, I suggest that the author goes back and fixes the beginning chapters of the novel, so that new readers would get a more positive picture of the story.
Honestly the only good thing about this novel is the cover picture. (Great cover picture! Thank you artist!) The writing is terribly constructed. I had read the reviews and was excited to start this story hoping to enjoy something that matched my interests. With seeing it had good ratings for the most part I fell faithfully victim to this poor novel that made my head hurt with frustration. It is written very broken. As if you are trying to describe looking at a manga of the story. The fluidity is just not there. It jumps too quickly and briefly over anything in the story as if someone is reading only snippets as fast as they possibly can. There is not enough descriptions for a great, or even good mental depiction. I could barely get through the first two chapters without gagging on trying to follow the story. It seems as the author may not speak English as their primary language and it shows. If they do speak English as primary language, then I feel for them. I can see this actually being a great story idea but the author needs to collaborate with someone who can articulate a better setting for the story to give it depth and substance. As the story is written now, I can see it work for a manga but as a novel that can be enjoyed and make me want to continue reading, absolutely not!
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