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BRO..TRUCK-KUN INDUSTRIES?..MR. FORD?...MRS.HONDA?...its funny..nice.... its cool...OP MC...One man army style...AU or something unique..no BS romance but try to build it and make it realistic..no sad **** damn it...if harem keep it small. Just suggestions.... **: For MC's main power something like Hashiramas wood style [mixed with sharingan if you want or some BS new eye power] would be cool..I mean its has the second most powerful defense [after the gudodama-i mean it could deflect beast bombs] and its has a fucking mecha and exploding dragons..stupid powerful regeneration and the ability to adsorb nature energy easily and also the ability to control life force [to some extent] ...plus Hashiramas attacks are pretty cool....
A very good start to an OP fic. You have a MC who gets things done in a quick pace through out his childhood. He's a sand ninja and manages takes over as the leader at 13yrs old. This is due to his gamer abilities, but this doesn't make sense considering his goal was to train naruto as a father figure by being five years older. Guess that was brushed under in favor of the fix-it attitude the MC is starting to develop. Right now it's a bit early to see if this will follow cannon religiously, but I hope it doesn't. Otherwise this fic will lose its current positive momentum.
5β for you.. i like the story.. i like how he not helping everyone he knew with his system.. i like how he's OP.. and please stay like that.. the OP'ness that we people irl always wish to be.. we are already weak ass irl.. and it will be a LOT depressing if you let us see/read someone (MC) struggle in your story.. actually i have depressed a lot after reading a lot of nerfed MC~~ π£π£ So......... STAY OP!!!!! π€π€π€π€
A Cool story so far with good mc. Just don't soften up the mc just to appease some pussy idiots. The mc has trust issues and such thing as 'morals' shouldn't stop him putting seals and other precautions. After all, you wrote his past background like this. I hate it when writers write mc backstory as some tough badass mother fu*ker but then he acts like a bi*ch and restricts himself and allows everyone walks over him because apparently he is 'CHANGED' LOL!
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The story is like a text of a history book, it's a narrative type of story. Not much talking, too much info dump. Mc is like.. Well I can't tell if he's an semi-stupid, arrogant or just had a gamer mind set. The characters is just plain blank or is it just me that think of it. Well I'm not a writer so I will stop. Good luck wish this story a success :)