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Endless Love (:)

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Read Endless Love (:) novel written by the author DawsonSmallson on WebNovel, This serial novel genre is Fantasy Romance stories, covering r18, sliceoflife, loveatfirstsight, crush, seductive. ✓ Newest updated ✓ All rights reserved

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Lyla is a very astute college student -- she doesn't worry about boys. EVER! But after a turn of events something in her changes. Who will she choose, what will she do. What will they do with her! ------------------------------------------------------------------------- This is my first piece, and it's still being worked on. It is a romance, and I am SUPER excited to see where it goes and I hope you enjoy it too! will be updating the synopsis as more chapters come out!

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Eldritch_Umbra
Eldritch_UmbraLv1Eldritch_Umbra

For a first time novel, the writing quality is quite surprising, and is way better than my work when I first started. Naturally, with this being the first piece, it has the issues every first piece has. That being poor grammar and questionable sentence structure. Punctuation is in the wrong place, and some of the word choice is questionable. As for the characters, they are pretty good, even if some of them fall victim to tropes. (The guy has a motorcycle because why not) There aren't any issues that haven't already been addressed, so I'll just say that you have natural talent, and you'll want to work on word choice, grammar, sentence structure, and perhaps some character traits.

The_WindChaser
The_WindChaserLv1The_WindChaser

Hello! I was interested in the title when I saw you text it on discord.😂 Anyways, my honest criticisms would be: -I see purple prose in your book, -wrong placements of commas and such, -too much "had", maybe try "was" or "were", -search for synonyms of words so you won't have to put "very" that often, -seperate paragraphs, it's not appealing to see blocks of texts -try to let the story flow out, and let the readers know the attitudes of your character by showing their actions. Try to limit telling their personalities right from the get-go. Lastly, you're good! Good luck in writing!

Emmanuel_Peter203
Emmanuel_Peter203Lv4Emmanuel_Peter203

For a still developing story, i have to say, you tried. Just needs some more editing and time. But its good for a first time novel. Keep up the good work author, and remember, I NEED CHAPTER UPDATES! lol.

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