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It has potential at first. But the story getting more weird because of time travel which is should be banned by god. Yup its time travel, not timeline travel. U know how she has another self which named hongye or something which is appeared on cell saga. She is also has another self wich is old generation supreme kai.. its soo confusing. And idk how time patrol or lord chronoa didn't make an appearance. When she travel between the time, she created history herself which make look like the original dragon ball use to be. U know, when whis and beerus make an appearance after majin buu saga, they are quite shock seeing ayaka still alive after million years. While she still only in 40. Well the story itself is messed up because of mc. So i give it bad story review.
The story itself is really good. The problem is that the author can't keep their facts straight. You'll have a character introduced and then 3 chapters later that same character is suddenly called something entirely different. Even in the same paragraph I once saw the author call her Ayaka, then call her Ayame, then right back to Ayaka again... all the while calling her a 'he'. Later they go to planet Vegeta, even though the planet had been destroyed 30 years earlier. The author seemed to have the word "Vegeta" drilled into their head because he also started calling Bardock Vegeta as well. This story also suffers from the same thing most stories on this site do. For some reason authors here can't get the whole gender thing figured out, calling women "he/him". All in all, reading this story is like reading the memoirs of an Alzheimer's patient.
La historia es muy buena, y tenΓa un exelente potencial pero llegΓ³ un momento en que la cagaron, el autor no dejaba de confundir nombres y no explicaba bien los echos, parecΓa mΓ‘s como si lo viera en su imaginaciΓ³n y lo escribiera tal cual, como si los lectores pudieran ver lo mismo que el. AdemΓ‘s en algΓΊn momento paso a ser una novela de cultivo chino, nombres exesivamente raros y tΓtulos que no se entienden por quΓ© no afrece un estatus o comparaciΓ³n entre ellos, lo que lleva a que dichos tΓtulos y nombres no tengan fundamento y sea imposible saber su importancia. El desarrollo de personajes secundario fue pΓ©simo y no les diΓ³ un final siquiera, no sabemos que pasΓ³ con dragΓ³n ball world y los demΓ‘s, simplemente paso de un escenario a otro asΓ como asΓ salvΓ³ un mundo la adoraron y dijeron que estaba entre los tres mΓ‘s fuertes de la realidad pero nada mΓ‘s. Fue una increΓble historia pero el final y el desarrollo medio pudieron haber sido mucho mejores.
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