I was attracted to the story and I want to continue reading. However, I found the term to mention it used as "he" in almost every paragraph very repetitive. I advise you to decrease when using your own name. Hastin thought ... Hastin was curious ... You can refer to it using "him", but not very often, because it gets tiring. The novel has a good premise, I will accompany and support you!
Well catchy Umm title (gulp). Nice writing style, hmm good description, dialogue are nice as well. Well the story almost gave me chills cos I am one person who thinks a lot, I had already started thinking of his unfortunate life with the app and me in his shoes and the 5 random humans every month... Damn he is gonna be turned into a murderer. Hmm, for a first time writing a horror novel, you sure are doing a great work. Recommended for all horror and thriller fans. Come support this book, vote, review and leave a comment for our author here. She is doing a good job. Keep it up Darlene.
I am reviewing this story with only 3 chapters so far, this will be more like a general first impression. I would say I am quite hooked and am looking forward to newer chapters! Enjoy the plot so far, though the story develops too fast for my liking. Narration can be smoother, but that's just me being nitpicky. Punctuation can be better, but it's more than readable. Otherwise, I don't know about the characters and world background as there are only 3 chapters, so I'm leaving it at 4 stars for now. TL;DR: Some quality of life changes, but the story has got me hooked with its 3 chapters. Happy reading!
A well written novel. Creepy in general, but still I liked it. I normally don't find writing scary. Most horror movies are also boring most of the time. But this was not boring as things like The Nun, and others, and it was interesting to read. You could try and make it scarier by giving more description just before the climax of the scene, similar to how the background noises increase in tempo just before the ghost is revealed.
Been reading everything you write, every one of the books has been unique and eye catching. Can imagine the story in my head while I read and things fall in place very well in an orderly fashion. Scary parts are really well written and pop up like real surprises, story’s pace and build up is amazing for fast readers like me. keep writing. cheers!