matanman
To be honest I expected this story to be terrible or for the grammar and plot to be all over the place. And for that I do apologize I did not expect for it to be a hidden gem. As of chapter 9 where you have written up to for us readers to enjoy the story is flowing very smoothly and while there are a lot of cliches, they are put in such a way that even though we know them they are actually enjoyable to read. I'm definitely looking forward to more from you if you are serious about this story and don't drop it or start to rush your chapters and give us half baked nonsense. Then this is looking to be a new favorite of mine. I saw you had no reviews and since I've never reviewed a story I thought hey why not do a first for the both of us. You have a great story here and don't let anyone tell you otherwise. Have fun and for anyone reading this I hope you enjoy it as much as I have.
I never understand those that like things like this.. "No world boss dont brother me Ibonly want ingredients for cooking" Novels where the MC is op and is given always the best option but refuses because he is going on another path for comedy and stuff, bla bla bla This type of novel just isn't for me, it's straight boring, would prefer a normal slice of life at that point.
The grammar is so bad it's giving me a headache so I'm stopping here. I like the concept and it may have become one of me faves but the grammar and lack of care from the author to even try and fix it is killing it for me. It's one thing to spell a word wrong or to use the incorrect time but having missing words or phrases on top of all that just makes the sentences so annoying to decifer, that even my correct- as-I- read brain cannot keep up. That just means the writer didn't make an effort to even read the chapters a second time. Not being a native English speaker or having it as a second language is not an excuse for lasiness.
The MC is being led around by the nose, and the author says he is an idiot from the beginning and it really shows. It is so aobvious that its infruraiating. The story capitalizes on the MCs stupidity to further the plot by scamming, tricking, and misleading the MC with terrible vagueness that only he would fall for. It is a really well made story, if you don't mind the MC being lead around and not taking intiative. He mopes around about a past that he was determined to leave behind. The synopsis and intro came of as presenting this as a slice of life novel, where we watch the MC explore the game world with minimal fighting. But nope he just gonna be thrown through the wringer again and become another 'HERO' Just my out look on it, will stop reading it,may come back to it when I feel I can put up with the idiocy of the MC.
This book is absolutely amazing it's well-thought-out and it honestly intrigues me about his past and what his present and future would be like from now on oh and does he have kids. I think this book can go a long way and that is very worthy of being published and I only read a dozen chapters starting to have the urge to binge and I'm going to end up being caught up with the releases and but then I'm going to be like noooooooo~
Overall it's pretty decent, with fun and likable characters and a somewhat interesting world. Though the dialogue feels bad since they talk exposition most of the time, it is still an enjoyable read. There are a few issues with the writing, as there are sometimes missing or misplaced commas, periods, apostrophes, and etc. Along with some missing words. Though it's not a big deal as I can still understand it, it does ruin the flow and takes you out of the book. I recommend using grammarly and a bit of proofreading.
Possibly the best original books on this site in my opinion, it has a very interesting premise and good execution, however there are some parts that could be made better, for me the format of quotes are sometimes hard to read. The content is enjoyable but sometimes a bit weird, mc returns from fantasy world, sure. But how the hell did the original world gets copy of the fantasy world, while it may not be an exact copy it is on a thin line. I may have possibly read wrong on that tho. Also there seems to be a bit too many beauties already, I think it was 4 by now, to be honest it is a very common trope in novels and I thought this novel would go a bit differently but not so far so ~~ eh. That’s about all I could find wrong with it, wait I would think that this story requires some planing so it would take longer to write with it’s weird/different plot, it already shows. Yeah that’s about all, if your looking for a fresh breath into the vrmmorpg genre this is possibly the best choice in this platform.