The Undead Horde Of The Great Grass Sea (GOT)

The story is good so far but slow the story down or write some chapters (one before the wake up chapter for details on the MC and why he is how he is) and put one before the Wake up chapter then put some after to really explain how his horde grew and the struggles hes had controlling it (some of the dothraki probably tried to challenge him for the khal position) But if you dont want to do that try to mix it up a little really build up the characters and the world maybe do a little bit of kingdom building drop some flash backs of the MC and the travels hes done with the horde and then with how the story progresses show how he interacts with different people and how he thinks maybe switch the POV later down the line when the story has more chaps so the readers dont get bored but really great story so far ALSO A FEW BOOKS I RECOMMEND YOU LOOK AT ARE "The Burnt Prince-GOT SI" "Raiden's Storm (ASOIAF)" "GOT: The Golden Lion" I feel like they might be a books that can give you ideas on how to improve and make your story go smooth

religion and culture must be reformed, wear leather and steel armor like the mongols, produce portable catapults, adopt a proper form of government (although the mongol empire could not rule for a long time, this is vesteros, immortality with a little blood magic is not a dream

Really enjoyable I personally haven't seen a Thrones fic with this premise before and I like it the mc is fun to read with his calm yet ruthless personality Plus who doesn't like good lemon's In there stories.

Really interesting take on a ASOIAF especially from a refreshing side that’s not the basic Westeros Noble set up that others tend to do.

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