The story is good so far but slow the story down or write some chapters (one before the wake up chapter for details on the MC and why he is how he is) and put one before the Wake up chapter then put some after to really explain how his horde grew and the struggles hes had controlling it (some of the dothraki probably tried to challenge him for the khal position) But if you dont want to do that try to mix it up a little really build up the characters and the world maybe do a little bit of kingdom building drop some flash backs of the MC and the travels hes done with the horde and then with how the story progresses show how he interacts with different people and how he thinks maybe switch the POV later down the line when the story has more chaps so the readers dont get bored but really great story so far ALSO A FEW BOOKS I RECOMMEND YOU LOOK AT ARE "The Burnt Prince-GOT SI" "Raiden's Storm (ASOIAF)" "GOT: The Golden Lion" I feel like they might be a books that can give you ideas on how to improve and make your story go smooth
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