This is a good novel, being strangled to death by the narration style. The first person narration is killing it.
Its like a good movie being shot through a selfie. with the shaky arm and the annoying face of the person visible, even while recording the beautiful landscape.
I do not know why the author chose to use first person narration when 3rd person is exactly what this level of story needs.
It is like taking a real bullit and forcing it In a BB gun.
Anyway. At this point it doesn't matter how badly or lowly the author thinks of his skills in 3rd person narrative, I would rather read that than watch him ruin such a great story with s hitty, amateur 1st person narration.
There is zero immersion in story. It's like watching a person trying to direct and act in a movie at the same time, yelling cut and action in the middle of a scene.
Author san, I implore you to shift to 3rd person narration like any self respecting author out there. stop holding your self to the embarrassing standards of webnovel.
There is a bigger world outside the bottom of a well. Your novel deserves better, so please stop letting your fear of 3rd person narration ruin a good book.
Sincerely,
Ted Mosby 2016