Comments of chapter undefined of Game of Thrones: House of Tarth

Hmmm, not really any dialogue out of the 16 paragraphs. Dialogues & conversations between characters are vital, it keeps the story flowing smoothly. Just a suggestion though.

what's the point of all of this? I really don't understand

increase the chapters length, it's like they are incomplete.

It has been Monologue after Monologue, But nothing actually happens. and MC is acting Idiotic.

Slavery is inefficient in the long term it's chains ⛓️ that people can't see that are most effective

Dropped or break ?

I'm very unlucky, the story is updated every day, I find it and start reading... It's been 4 days without an update. 😔☹️

Well at least now we have interaction between characters and it no longer feels like I'm reading a logbook, I liked the story so far it's very interesting his romantic partner is a bit dull but considering his age the most relevant female characters are or ten years younger or about twelve to fifteen years older, of course considering that it is something like the middle age these age differences are irrelevant, but at least there is a reason for choosing it even if it is more likely a way of not interfering with the canon of significantly with the choice of a main female character, but again I liked having at least an explanation for why she was chosen.

Thanks for chapter. Lots of information and little dialogue, the story has been at a standstill since the last chapter and apart from the archer's death, the story hasn't changed at all

Nice

Good Chapter 👍

Thanks for the chapter

thanks

Marcoo, do you have an update schedule prepared for this story or are you releasing the chapters as time permits?

Ty :)

I was interested in editing this story, but unfortunately, I am a paid editor which is a major turnoff and the writing style doesn't match my expertise, to the point I will indulge too much and change a lot of things, making the story inrecognizable. I would strongly recommend going to discord fanfiction or ao3, as there are a lot of beta readers there who would gradually help you proofread this and that too for free.

Thanks for chapter

Thanks for the chapter