Comments of chapter undefined of Reborn as Jon Snow's Twin - (Game of Thrones)
Reborn as Jon Snow's Twin - (Game of Thrones)
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that was a lot of words for very little happening. i have no idea what he is doing so i cant be difinitive but to me he just threw away the one chance to change things, worse he used the attempted murder and breaking of guest rights to get himself a 'name'. how can jamie even give such a thing... ned still goes south, his sisters will still follow, war will still break out. but is this before or after assassins have taken care of joe, bran and sensei? its always funny how the outlawing of slavery goes out the window when a lord or king commands, how can you command those who are free? isnt taking the role of kingsguard to throw away your name and house for a life time of service and cellibacy how is giving one a name and then asking to throw it away a reward? the story is a lot of screaming and swearing and little plot so far
I liked the chapter, the animals howling and the raven felt like a cool anime style moment but could be seen as leaning too much into the rule of cool trope. The thing that was kind of cringe was the kneeling it felt way too out of place and forced. Otherwise a fun chapter, keep up the good work author.
This chapter is a gamechanger i was a bit suspicious with why would change to nix when he's a Targaryen as well and that's better. overall this novel is good the development to the characters to how the chapters are long and how its been processed rather than rushed ones its good and for that ill give a stone or whatever its called. Do you know what would make this better even more he plans to be the next king of Westeros or he does cause in my opinion if he doesn't what would be the point as being the king it will be legitimate through raegar rather than Daenerys. But i thought it this way he can adjust his house flag to have both void and a dragon representing nix meaning the merging of Targaryen in one new house together as it would make sense than leaving his Real house and leaving the dragons as he's able to also control them plus it was told there is a dragon egg in the crypt which you could use to hatch a dragon for himself and house. If you need any ideas of what you could write about for further plots message me and i just want to say this novel can go longer if you have patience and not give up but also ignore those other readers who arent actually trying to make it good or last longer and your work is reaching the level of novel standard if not already so in my opinion don't add harem as they mess things up and don't make sense.
I think it was cool but no way Jamie doesnât kill him, or Cersei poisons him. And I feel like Robert would force him to come to kings landing just so he could have another drinking partner. Yeah he likes joe, but he also has a inflated ego thatâs the size of his kingdom. But whatever itâs still fun.
