Dumpling_Aunt
when it comes to the transitions from one setting to another, you could use some improvement .but your way of writing is very nice.
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Woah, that was an incredible start for a cultivation novel. normally it's some weird start like a glowing talisman or 'selected by fate', can't wait to see how to story progresses!
ayee the first chap is great! :D
Keep up the good work
I like the start, can't wait wha's going to happen!
It's a good start, nothing particularly remarkable in exception for the :O
