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A_Valentine

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I'm A. Valentine and I'm back. Daily updates for Clues You Left, you can read the other book but the newest is better. Remember to leave reviews so I know what to improve :)

2020-11-11 JoinedGlobal
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine1yr
    Posted

    Its definitely a slow burn kind of book I'm going for, it is a mystery after all. After I hit my first 10k words, I'm gonna slow down my updates to once or maybe twice a week to allow breathing room when I take up a job. I put a lot of work into these characters, having written with them before which naturally led to character development. I'm proud of my work and quality of writing can always use improvements.

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    Clues You Left
    Fantasy · A_Valentine
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine1yr
    Posted

    I don't know if you're first language is english, but either way you could use some grammar, punction and general improvement. Grammarly is a good resource if you're an english native or fluent. Overall, its a general zombie apocalypse with the anime tropes someone who expect.

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    How Did The Zombie Game Become Real?!
    Fantasy · LeonWilhems
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Posted

    I really liked the indeoth description of the character snd his environment in the first chapter, it really set a scene for me. I personally struggle to imagine scenes and need help with it. The grammar could use work and you could definitely benefit running it through or writing it in grammarly before publishing it.

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    Mysterious Symbols
    Fantasy · The_Celestial_King
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Commented

    they sighed,

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    Mysterious Symbols
    Fantasy · The_Celestial_King
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Commented

    they sighed*

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    Mysterious Symbols
    Fantasy · The_Celestial_King
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Commented

    the eldest*

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    Mysterious Symbols
    Fantasy · The_Celestial_King
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Posted

    If English is not your first language let me know, but the grammar definitely got on nerves and I couldnt really understand the plot. Once they were claiming they cant kill her, but then attack her, then she has a guardian angel, its so confusing to me.

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    Monster in Batavia
    History · Tom_Ardy
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Posted

    wow, I really loved this book. I really enjoyed this book and honestly, I hope this continues. Of course the grammar can always use work but nothing grammarly cant fix. Such a good book

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    the Enchantress
    Fantasy · eleonora
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Commented

    I really like it. reminds me a lot of my MC

    Ch 1 Chapter One
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    the Enchantress
    Fantasy · eleonora
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Posted

    Grammar could use a lot of improvements as well as proper punctuation. Their wasnt much background information I picked up on, the character design is good and I didnt really understand the story plot, at first it was high stakes, then it was something else. Throughly confused

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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Commented

    I see no reason to censor the cuss words and if you do, make sure all letters are captilized or uncaptilized

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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Commented

    starting off strong with high stakes, I like it. but your grammar could use some work but grammarly could help with that

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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Posted

    I like the way it was written, but the grammar and punctuation errors got my nerved very quickly, but they're very simple fixes. I truly loved the plot but the dialouge confused me at times, but other then that, I like the book

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    DEADIE
    Fantasy · Madyan_wani
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Posted

    my updates are erratic but the story is finished, with the last chunk if chapters ready to be released. I definitely need to work on that update schedule, but as the author, I know my work needs improvement, but this is still my baby.

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    Rebellion Against Power
    Fantasy · A_Valentine
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Posted

    Your grammar could use some work, nothing grammarly can't. Its very simple fixes. I like the story and the world building, very in-depth. I did get confused when she first talked to the white flame with other people around because I thought she was speaking aloud. Italics could fix that confusion. Overall, I really enjoyed it

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    Legend of the White Haired Cultivator
    Fantasy · Dumpling_Aunt
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  • A_Valentine
    A_Valentine3yr
    Commented

    when it comes to the transitions from one setting to another, you could use some improvement .but your way of writing is very nice.

    Ch 1 Chapter 1 Strange Bright Star
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    Legend of the White Haired Cultivator
    Fantasy · Dumpling_Aunt
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