A_Valentine
I'm A. Valentine and I'm back. Daily updates for Clues You Left, you can read the other book but the newest is better. Remember to leave reviews so I know what to improve :)
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Its definitely a slow burn kind of book I'm going for, it is a mystery after all. After I hit my first 10k words, I'm gonna slow down my updates to once or maybe twice a week to allow breathing room when I take up a job. I put a lot of work into these characters, having written with them before which naturally led to character development. I'm proud of my work and quality of writing can always use improvements.
I really liked the indeoth description of the character snd his environment in the first chapter, it really set a scene for me. I personally struggle to imagine scenes and need help with it. The grammar could use work and you could definitely benefit running it through or writing it in grammarly before publishing it.
they sighed,
they sighed*
the eldest*
Grammar could use a lot of improvements as well as proper punctuation. Their wasnt much background information I picked up on, the character design is good and I didnt really understand the story plot, at first it was high stakes, then it was something else. Throughly confused
I see no reason to censor the cuss words and if you do, make sure all letters are captilized or uncaptilized
starting off strong with high stakes, I like it. but your grammar could use some work but grammarly could help with that
Your grammar could use some work, nothing grammarly can't. Its very simple fixes. I like the story and the world building, very in-depth. I did get confused when she first talked to the white flame with other people around because I thought she was speaking aloud. Italics could fix that confusion. Overall, I really enjoyed it