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Hello! Editor here! I'm simply here to explain how our story works. First of all, there are character changing scenes. What I mean by that is we change characters in some scenes, while it's Ryuu in one scene we might need to change the story's perspective to Hiroshi or Lezlie or even other characters. That allows us to make our story much better and simpler to tell. Second of all, there is place changing. And what I mean by that is there is place changing scenes, when that happens environment and the characters changes. We have to do that to introduce the other places of our world and our other characters. Thank you for reading and supporting our story! Have a good day! (And also the MC is Ryuu.)
In our story when there are POV changes, there are --- lines that we use. That means our POV on the story changes. We do that to introduce our other characters in the story. And a quick reminder our story has mistakes too, that is because the writer 's main language isn't English. Thank you for reading our story, have a good day!
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You may not remember me, but I commented on a different account in your first book.I had to open this account because my account was stolen.anyway, back to the point, your story is good, and your writing is better than before, but you throw a very slow episode.I have to say, this topic is more fluid than the other one.But please drop these sections quickly.If it goes like this, maybe one day you'll explode.
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Although I read a love story in general, I recently wrapped it in adventure stories and was very interested in this book. As soon as I started reading, I felt like I was in it. But there's something missing from the story, and that's romance. I'm looking for the author here, please, please, put a Love event, because your story is perfect and I definitely want to see love here. I can't wait to see the episodes. [img=recommend]
okay look story is decent but I have a large problem. the way it's written is really disorienting. take the synopsis the king says " all the other brothers but the youngest brother." rather than " all but the youngest brother" see how the second sentence flows better. also us he or they sometimes. when the kind is being addressed and speaks you don't need to say the king just say he. I am not trying to be a hater I genuinely want this book to succeed and I'm trying to provide constructive criticism.