Reviews of Hollywood ShowBiz Lord
Hollywood ShowBiz Lord
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What a shameless self-review............... But what I can I do, I love my own work.............. I want to see how far my work can go...................
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So if you've not looked at the tag and clicked on Hollywood one you should. This story is posted on Oct 30.....another story which is LITERALLY the same exact one almost except a few minor background details was posted weeks earlier....so either this dude is that author too or well he just copied and pasted and change some background and name details....I read the other one first and 13 chapters in this one is same basically so far including the time in history it starts, movies and child author.....
Okay so let me put this in here since the author hasn't bothered to. It is a harem. So if you're like me who are fed up with them then you won't like this story. It was good up to here, grammar was awful but you could see it gradually get better witch is a plus. The thing that has made me drop is you have guessed it the harem... kinda annoyed the author didn't put it in as I wouldn't have wasted my time if I knew. Worse is this is a modern setting so harem makes even less sense... What kinda annoyed me is that the mc tries to justify that harems are okay and that only true love between a man and woman can have it. Like wtf it's like letting your significant other fck around, would you accept that? No, nobody would. Yeah soooooo, gl to author but pls put in harem tag cause for all the ppl like me it's a waste of time and you wouldn't have to read comments like this.
As in my previous comment I emphasize that it is rushing the story and not doing real world building, I will add that there is a huge problem with the interaction of the characters and the plot in general, where did they meet? When? How did they meet? How was the process of finding a publisher? When did the MC start acting classes? How did he meet his teacher, being that he's a renowned former actor? How was the audition for the role in the theater play and when did it happen? Honestly, I don't want to sound condescending but it is necessary that you as an author acquire the mentality of asking questions in order to be able to flesh out the plot, because in the current picture it seems that the character just gets the things he wants without any difficulty, besides, it sucks that you put things in that should be implied, such as the character's lack of general inexperience in what is due to things like business, among other things. It takes time to improve, take your time and start acquiring a more inquisitive mindset and this will greatly improve your writing.
