Zero_Things
I donât know how others feel but to me the passage of time in this chapter is a little off, like you forgot a sentence or paragraph. I mean: 1. He woke up 2. Greeted everybody 3. Opened gifts 4. Everybody left 5. Parents go to bed Events 1-3 would likely take less than 3 hours but everyone left soon after and it suddenly became night time. I suggest you add a sentence to emphasize the passage of time like; âVarious conversations took place while the guests enjoyed theselves while dusk grow closer, eventually people started to say their goodbyes.â
Mate why would you use Japanese names when His parents have the name Krista and Luke? Literally why even use Japanese when you are not capable of thinking a name? Do you think japanese names sound cool no they don't. They look cringe and weird in scenes like this kinda similar to the katana hype things.